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for Within the Lies

by Sylvia

schedule September 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
okay, so i'm only up to ch.2 so far, but i really like this, and i love the twins and am so glad they're good guys, be quite nifty if they're some of harry's mates too :D can't wait to see what's up with harry, what his changes are and everything as well. *skips off to read more*
schedule September 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
this is so totally awesome! love the twins, you'e done a great job with them and harry, and i love snips and his sense of humor, and sy seems pretty cool too. figure snape is gonna be one of his mates but curious to who else you're going to come up with. and i think your sex scene was just fine, as you said, 2 yrs pent up frustration and first time prob would equal quickie lol love this, can't wait to see more :D
schedule September 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
good chapter but in the future can you put more discription into the men bodies especially when it involves teasing

Also I checked your new thread and you haven't put hints as to what they are on it and the only thing I could get from this was that they were snake creatures such as Naga ir another snake creature (I have one in mind I just can't spell it)
schedule September 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Contest 3... I think the twins are Naga seeing as they understand parseltoung, or some other type of snake related creature...

Also... I LOVE THIS STORY!! I can't WAIT for you to update!!
schedule September 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
*glomps!* YEAH UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Runs around in happy circles* and really a dementor?...yeah im cool with it i love the twists in your story! i love Sy in his head and that he's not just the dementor but the QUEEN! lol soo cute, and your not as evil this time (thank you for not leaving us on a to big of a cliff)

and shippo? really?....yeah ok he's cute enough. (except that bow...i hate that blue bow...and im a girl, he's a boy... lol) thank you for the update and by the way your doing amazing with the betaing yourself!
please update again soon!
Kit :)
person yngoldfogee
schedule September 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Love this story, the way you intersperse the humour with the serious and looking forward to your next update.

As to the next mate I had been thinking Severus but then I read your clues so I'll have to go with Charlie.
person ech1964
schedule September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Contest 2 guess -- Charlie Wesley
schedule September 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i think harry is some kind of ice creature and though i have an idea on his next mate i want to contemplate it for a bit more. by the way i love the story.
schedule September 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Contest 1 I think harry is some type of alternate dimension ice demon.
Contest 2 I think Harry
person Orkchild
schedule September 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
next mate charles weasly and for my 2 cents worth I want Snape to be a mate.