rate_review Reviews

Somehow I'm not surprised. Sev is an old standard for a critter mate... though none the less one who generally makes things awkward when he comes back to himself. Glad Harry's got some protection now. Still, why didn't Harry hex the creep, was it a sub/ dom thing? Will there be an OC in the mix or will it be only canon characters?
Here, have some questions. :P

i love where this is going. keep it up.

I LOVE IT!!! I can't wait for the next chapter! I have no idea who the other mate might be, maybe Draco? I guess Draco is veela but you said in the first chapter that they were similar so I suppose that's possible. Just one tiny little thing, you were spelling rogue as rouge. Rouge is the stuff to redden your cheeks n lips; it's not a big mistake but it is a little noticeable especially towards the end of the second chapter. Please update soon!!

hummmmm... how about the Twins as mate 2 and 3 or maybe one of the older boys, Bill might be a good choice.

i love it

This story has promise! i would point out that Dumbledore gives Harry the password to his new private quarters, but doesn't tell Harry where they are, or how to get there, and the next minutes Harry has sorted out his things. You might want to make sure details like this are not missed out as they add greatly to the background of the story. You also have Dumbledore being aware of Harry's inheritance with no explanation of how or why he knows. This is a common theme in HP fiction, I know, but still needs to be explained to the reader. A short walk with Dumbledore taking Harry to his new rooms whilst talking about why he knows Harry came into his inheritance, or maybe that the book which registers the children for entrance at 11 makes it known to the headmaster if they come into a creature inheritance would solve the problems in the chapter. it would also allow the chapter to be more "show" than tell which will give it more depth. however, all that said I look forward to where you will be taking this tale.

I enjoy the story. But you don't give us where in the time line this is happening.

With all due respect, unless these agressive unmated dominants are red, they are in fact "rogue" rather than "rouge". Happy writing

Great start, can't wait to see what Harry gets into next!

I was hoping it would be Snape. I'm enjoying the story. Thanks for writing it.