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for Broken Things

by use2b2t2

person Persy
schedule November 15, 2021 at 12:00 AM

HUGS!!!!

person Anon
schedule May 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I liked your story, but it could use some more work. Hope everything that you'll be able to solve whatever is bothering you.
schedule May 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...

WHY is she giving up now, of all times? HOW did she realize he's "not meant to be mended"? And WHY, in the seven Hells, did he write the letters if all he felt was a slight pang of regret, quickly quashed down?

Interesting premise, but I'm sure you can do better than this. Your dilemma included.