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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was great. I love how Amelle is now. I didn't like her at first but once you heard her story I felt sorry for her and now I really like her. I also like how Amelle told Harry about how she had felt the same thing about Ashleigh and that Ashleigh had acted the same way with her. I hope that Amelle now keeps her children away from Ashleigh now to.
For the next heat please give Draco a biological child, I just keep feeling sorry for him. He loves the babies so much, I want him to have one as well. He also needs an heir all the others have heirs now, Draco needs one and a baby with Draco's hair and Harry's eyes would be gorgeous or with Harry's hair and Draco's eyes.
I also can't wait to see what will happen to the Dursley's and Ashleigh.
For the next heat please give Draco a biological child, I just keep feeling sorry for him. He loves the babies so much, I want him to have one as well. He also needs an heir all the others have heirs now, Draco needs one and a baby with Draco's hair and Harry's eyes would be gorgeous or with Harry's hair and Draco's eyes.
I also can't wait to see what will happen to the Dursley's and Ashleigh.
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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
oh my god!!! yay! new chapter...I'd actually checked yesterday if it had been updated but I am so
glad that you updated!!!
I liked the heat scene, different setting for smut is always nice. Loved all the table sex ;)
it would figure that the one time draco gets in early the heats dry!
glad that you updated!!!
I liked the heat scene, different setting for smut is always nice. Loved all the table sex ;)
it would figure that the one time draco gets in early the heats dry!
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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
omg! i couldn't wait till this chapter came out! another lovely, beautifully, well written chapter! i will be waiting on pins and needles for the next one!
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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Finally got a chance to just read all the chapters I missed for this story (haven't gotten to scaldie bits yet) What can I say but, Amazing!!! You have really out done yourself with story and character building! I am a little sad about Max's mom but it's not suprising since she went through that horrible ordeal (wont mention it here for spoilers incase others read this before that chapter). Maybe she can get therapy like Amillia (did I spell her name wrong? Probably lol. i'm a horrible speller.)I have to say that out of all the characters that you created my favorite are the kids! I love how they all have different personalities already. Oh but I feel so bad for the baby that gets the diper rash :-( I just want to give him a big old hug. And little leo too. Q:How cute is he?! A:So cute!
Also happy belated B-day! It just have to say that I'm stunned that someone as young as you are has such a wonderful gift for writing. Great Job :-)
Well cant wait to read what happens to harry next. Although I'm always dreading the worst for him. (I'm such a sentimental Hufflepuff. I never want harry to have to suffer again.)
Oh and please please please have a super cute draco/harry baby. He/She or they would be soooooo cute!
Also happy belated B-day! It just have to say that I'm stunned that someone as young as you are has such a wonderful gift for writing. Great Job :-)
Well cant wait to read what happens to harry next. Although I'm always dreading the worst for him. (I'm such a sentimental Hufflepuff. I never want harry to have to suffer again.)
Oh and please please please have a super cute draco/harry baby. He/She or they would be soooooo cute!
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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Yet another perfect chapter. Love it and can't wait for more.
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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant as always!
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February 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm sooo sorry that I havent reviewed in months. Real life has a way of getting inbetween me and my drakens. So I have read several of the new chapters yet or the scaldie bits either but I will as soon as I get off of this double shift nightmare of a work schedule. I did want to let you know that you still have an excited fan out there (me)even if I'm too tired to acutally turn on my computer most days. Well Keep up the awesome writing as always!
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February 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Still loving this, after re reading three times. Hope life gives you time to write more
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February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I have been reading this story since you first adopted it and while I loved it at first I find that I am now reading it simply to find out how it ends. As I have read each chapter I have noticed that there are several things that you could handle better, both in the writing of this story and in how you respond to your readers. I am not a professonal writer at this time though I am attending college for a degree in English with an Emphasis on Creative Writing and I do intend to make a living off of my abilities as a writer and as a proofreader/editor.
The first thing that bothers me about this story is that Harry is written almost exactly the same in this as he is in your other story "The Life and Trials of Harry James Potter-Malfoy". This bothers me because it strikes me as being uncomfortably similar to the way Stephanie Meyer writes her female characters, which is NOT something any writer should strive for. I also feel that this shows a lack of diversity in your abilities.
The second thing that bothers me about this story is fact that you felt the need to make "The Scaled Bits" a reading requirement to understand the main story. There isn't really anything wrong with making side stories to a main story, I have done it myself, but the moment you begin to put vital details into it the entire practice begins to reflect badly on you. This is particularly bothersome considering you have mentioned that you intend to become a professional writer. I have read many stories both on this site and on fanfiction.net in which a writer has rewritten a chapter countless times to make it flow properly. Instead of making people read two stories to understand one, it would be better if you took some time to actually plan out each chapter and tweak them to fit the flow you want them to.
The third thing that bothers me is the way you handle the reader's reaction to your story. I have not read each and every review word for word looking for nasty reviews about how long it takes you to update, though I did look through several pages of them and out of the 50 or so I read I saw mostly encouragement. Like it or not YOU ARE WRITING FOR THEM. If you weren't you would not have posted it. I find the fact that instead of thanking the readers who felt the need to leave you some 230 reviews, you feel the need to berate them for asking when you will be updating or for asking you to update again soon. I suggest that you take a moment to look at this story as if you are making money off of it. If you were, that money would be from the readers who have purchased your book.
I am also bothered by the fact that you feel the need to complain that you spend your free time writing. That's how you get better, how you improve your skill. Do you think that a musician simply picks up their intrument one day and plays a concerto with no practice? Do you think that JK Rowling writes as a hobby? Do you think that the artists who make everything from the advertisements to modern art just paint for fun?
You wish to be a professional writer, so act as a professional writer acts. I spend about 99% of my free time working on my stories, and all of them are simply practice at the moment. I lie down to go to sleep at night thinking about my stories. If you expect to be a professional you will have to do the same or you will fail.
This review is not meant as a flame, but rather as a combination of constructive criticism and a wake up call. With a little more work and a more mature outlook you can be a good writer. You are on the right path, you just have a lot more work than you seem to think you do.
The first thing that bothers me about this story is that Harry is written almost exactly the same in this as he is in your other story "The Life and Trials of Harry James Potter-Malfoy". This bothers me because it strikes me as being uncomfortably similar to the way Stephanie Meyer writes her female characters, which is NOT something any writer should strive for. I also feel that this shows a lack of diversity in your abilities.
The second thing that bothers me about this story is fact that you felt the need to make "The Scaled Bits" a reading requirement to understand the main story. There isn't really anything wrong with making side stories to a main story, I have done it myself, but the moment you begin to put vital details into it the entire practice begins to reflect badly on you. This is particularly bothersome considering you have mentioned that you intend to become a professional writer. I have read many stories both on this site and on fanfiction.net in which a writer has rewritten a chapter countless times to make it flow properly. Instead of making people read two stories to understand one, it would be better if you took some time to actually plan out each chapter and tweak them to fit the flow you want them to.
The third thing that bothers me is the way you handle the reader's reaction to your story. I have not read each and every review word for word looking for nasty reviews about how long it takes you to update, though I did look through several pages of them and out of the 50 or so I read I saw mostly encouragement. Like it or not YOU ARE WRITING FOR THEM. If you weren't you would not have posted it. I find the fact that instead of thanking the readers who felt the need to leave you some 230 reviews, you feel the need to berate them for asking when you will be updating or for asking you to update again soon. I suggest that you take a moment to look at this story as if you are making money off of it. If you were, that money would be from the readers who have purchased your book.
I am also bothered by the fact that you feel the need to complain that you spend your free time writing. That's how you get better, how you improve your skill. Do you think that a musician simply picks up their intrument one day and plays a concerto with no practice? Do you think that JK Rowling writes as a hobby? Do you think that the artists who make everything from the advertisements to modern art just paint for fun?
You wish to be a professional writer, so act as a professional writer acts. I spend about 99% of my free time working on my stories, and all of them are simply practice at the moment. I lie down to go to sleep at night thinking about my stories. If you expect to be a professional you will have to do the same or you will fail.
This review is not meant as a flame, but rather as a combination of constructive criticism and a wake up call. With a little more work and a more mature outlook you can be a good writer. You are on the right path, you just have a lot more work than you seem to think you do.
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February 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I just read chapter 63, which I loved, and then the reviews. I hope your okay, I know what it's like getting sick a lot, and I hope you feel better.