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Very sad... I wouldn't be surprised if Harry killed himself.

Could I be anymore grossed out? eww. I hate Draco or Harry with anyone else except for each other.

I thought about reading the whole thing but it's too depressing and disturbing, with Draco being with Voldermort, gag me. Anyways, don't be offended, I am just sick of reading angsty, depressing stories.

Loving the story so far.. Hoping to see another chapter soon.

Hey there
I'm really enjoying your story so far; thanks so much for writing it. I just thought I'd help review your paragraph structure. You have a tendency to split the actions and dialogue of a character between two paragraphs, and the reader can't tell who's speaking easily. So for example you have something like:

"story story story story story Draco looked to Harry.

(new paragraph) 'who's dialogue is this?'. Harry frowned"

So although I know Draco is supposed to be the speaker, the break indicates that it's actually Harry speaking at the time.
Anyway, great story. Hope you don't mind the review!

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I'm sorry you are not going to continue this story and I am shocked it did not get more reviews. Its really good. I usually don't read as much on AFF because of the lack of e-mail alerts on this site as opposed to the other fan sites. If you posted on those sites too, I'm sure you would have received more reviews. Great story!

You need to finish this!!! T-T I'm still crying!!!! I need the closure, please!!!!!!!

All have a price, the decision that Draco made was hard and necesary but have a high cost. I loved so far

i so hope that harry gets his baby back before she grows up

I love this story. And I feel really bad for both Harry and Draco. I can't believe that Voldemort will take their child. I really hope that they'll be able to escape before it happens and be a little family together. And what's up with all the dissapearenses?
I hope you'll update soon