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November 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Finish the story please...
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July 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This story so far is just amazing. Seriously beyond amazing. I can' pick anything out that I love because I love it all. Haha! I can't wait for the next chapter, I am really looking forward to it.
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June 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
loved it! More please.
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June 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
this is not harry's day.
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May 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
love it so edward showed up cool any way want more
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May 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Well, I'm going to be honest. The idea is decent and the writing isn't bad. The only real problem I have with this is that Harry isn't Harry in any way, shape or form.
His background, his significance, his personality and even his appearance have all been stripped away, leaving nothing at all to justify using the name. You've created an OC and just called him Harry Potter. I would have enjoyed the character well enough you'd simply made him a random wizarding kid who was born around the same time as Teddy.
His mother, likewise could have been 'any' charms master. There's nothing at all that makes her Lily and there was no reason to call her that. If they had been OC's I would have thought, "Oh, how clever". As it stands, a beloved character has been rendered completely unrecognizable and I found myself disappointed, if only because I was expecting Harry and this isn't him.
His background, his significance, his personality and even his appearance have all been stripped away, leaving nothing at all to justify using the name. You've created an OC and just called him Harry Potter. I would have enjoyed the character well enough you'd simply made him a random wizarding kid who was born around the same time as Teddy.
His mother, likewise could have been 'any' charms master. There's nothing at all that makes her Lily and there was no reason to call her that. If they had been OC's I would have thought, "Oh, how clever". As it stands, a beloved character has been rendered completely unrecognizable and I found myself disappointed, if only because I was expecting Harry and this isn't him.
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May 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I never did like Bella so this story was like a Siren call to me. So far I am pretty addicted to the story and always I eagerly await the next chapter.
By the way love your summery I think its awesome.
By the way love your summery I think its awesome.
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May 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
this is really good story but i found im going to wait until there more to review love it
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May 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Damnitalltohell! Bella could screw up a wet dream and not even be in it. She needs to go and play with her leech and leave Harry and Jacob alone. Although a Harry/Jacob/Teddy scene would be verrrryyyyy interesting. Nez pas?
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May 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oooooh~! This is amazing!! I'm all giggly and excite to see what will happen next.