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May 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Your story is definitely worth continuing as your idea of what happens after Hermione & Ron divorce is interesting. There is some cleanup needed but nothing major or that other writers haven't done also. I did have some concern about any alumni (even Hermione) being able to walk into a private school and interrupt a class in session. Maybe that happens as I haven't been to such a school and don't know myself. Also, why were they using two regular tents instead of a magical tent? Maybe they are harder to obtain than other fanfiction stories seem to indicate. A comment by a character can clarify that to the readers who may wonder about the use or non-use of a magical item. But fanfiction is mostly by definition AU, so there is no right or wrong on how you want to develop your story. Thank you.
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May 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The story is ok despite your rl loss. Your story is fine without a beta. There is nothing wrong with the short chapter. I feel in all your authors notes thus far you are apologizing. When I read your authors note at the end you are hesitant about how the newest chapter will be received and there really is no need. Your story is beautifully written and you should take confidence in that. I'm sure all writers worry about the quality of their work but your story has a unique plot thus far and its not your typical cliched Snap/Hermione. Your a talented writer and your story is great; gain confidence in that. I cannot wait to read more:)
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May 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I would have loved to read more, but what was written was absolutely brilliant!!!
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May 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic story so far, I love the plot and you certainly write very well. I am looking forward to read more of this!!!
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May 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry to hear about your loss. I hope that things get better for you.
As for the story, I like where this is heading. You do have some spelling and grammar and punctuation errors which you should have someone look at, but this is otherwise, quite well written, and I'm enjoying it.
As for the story, I like where this is heading. You do have some spelling and grammar and punctuation errors which you should have someone look at, but this is otherwise, quite well written, and I'm enjoying it.
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May 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The story was fine, but family is more important. My sympathies and prayers are with you and yours at this time. Take care and write when you can.