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April 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great story, you really cough my attention I really hope you will update soon
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February 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story. I'm excited to see how it will all play out, and I hope you update soon...
I like your portrayal of Harry and Draco, and I'm excited to see where Harry gets sorted, though it seems like Slytherin will be obvious. I'm also curious as to how everything will end up revealed to the Wizarding World, and how everything will play out. Again, I hope you update soon, :D
I like your portrayal of Harry and Draco, and I'm excited to see where Harry gets sorted, though it seems like Slytherin will be obvious. I'm also curious as to how everything will end up revealed to the Wizarding World, and how everything will play out. Again, I hope you update soon, :D
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August 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
okay i am totally lost we go from snape adopting harry the muggle way to them living together with them being lovers and teaching at hogwarts. what the heck happened in between?
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
What happened?
Chapter 4 had Severus & 4-yr-old Harry finally becoming father & son, and then in Chapter 5 it's after the war is OVER and it's HP/SS?
Did you mean to completely skip over at least FOURTEEN YEARS?
Chapter 4 had Severus & 4-yr-old Harry finally becoming father & son, and then in Chapter 5 it's after the war is OVER and it's HP/SS?
Did you mean to completely skip over at least FOURTEEN YEARS?
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ok I'm sorry but that time jump was just way to much. You go from 5 year old Harry to adult Harry. No mention of what happened and how Snape raised him, or his apparent falling out with Draco, or how him and Snape came to be an item or anything. It's just too much. Especially if you are going to leave it up to side stories to explain. Unfortunately, those are things that really need to be part of the story. Not sure if I will be continuing this one sadly, but the first part was amazing.
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Really loved the first four chapters! I really enjoy a good Severus raises Harry story and you set this one up to be a good one.
Now I can read and see that there would be a time jump but this seems a little extreme. It truly doesn't even feel like the same story.
Not sure where you are going here, but I for one would really love to see the intervening years in the main story, not a side one.
I will wait to see what happens next before giving up on this one.
Now I can read and see that there would be a time jump but this seems a little extreme. It truly doesn't even feel like the same story.
Not sure where you are going here, but I for one would really love to see the intervening years in the main story, not a side one.
I will wait to see what happens next before giving up on this one.
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You do realize that your story now makes no sense
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
good story but i think you updated the wrong chapter 5
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
its not bad, but what lost me was the way the kids were acting. they talked like adults and not like children, even mature children.
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That last chapter is a little out of no where.did you post it in the wrong story?