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August 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Sequel plzzzz! ^_^
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May 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I'm going to admit up front: I'm mainly reading this because the WTF-ness of the pairing intrigues me. You made a good first impression with chapter 1. Here's hoping it continues.
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May 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love it I love it I love it!! PLEASE write a sequel!
If you do, Hermione SHOULD be pregnant.
As for Peeves, I think Peeves should be his last name...so it's like Jason Peeves or something like that. You know? So you still get the Peeves in there. :D
If you do, Hermione SHOULD be pregnant.
As for Peeves, I think Peeves should be his last name...so it's like Jason Peeves or something like that. You know? So you still get the Peeves in there. :D
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
just read this story in one sitting! It was brilliant! Hope your going to do a sequal, hope hermione wont be pregnant, let them have fun first! And the 'pranks' peeves played on malfoy - brilliant! Poor Ginny! I had an idea he was using her as soon as it started, just didnt think it would be like that! And im glad you didnt go straight into happily ever after! That would just suck! Loved the whole story! And i think its adorable that you think dam is a swear word! (in ireland and the uk,its just a regular expression!!!)
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April 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Id love a sequel, but a Hermione/Salazar story would be cool.
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Definetly a sequel. It was good but the ending left a lot of loose strings and I don't care for that much (just like I don't like Draco much either.) I think we should give him a good solid name like Michael. Michael Peeves does have a nice ring to it. As far as unusual pairings? I think a nice one with Luna and the elder Malfor would be in order.
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, and I just remembered. How about a nice juicy one with Hermione and Kingsley Shacklebolt please.
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Alright, now its time for the overall review! Usually when i follow stories to the end I like to take a look through them again and give my overall thoughts.
First of all, I love that you had the guts to post a story with a rare and strange pairing such as this. Not every writer can put their kinkiest ideas out there without fearing the rejection. Its a harsh world out there in fanfiction--and you are one of the few survivors.
The flow of the story was good. The smut scenes were amazing, incredibly nice. The dynamics between Peeves and Hermione was believable though I personally thought your Hermione was a little too mild tempered. I also thought your Ginny was too mild tempered as well. In my interpretation of the characters, Hermione doesn't seem the type to just let Peeves go after he hurt her. She would hex his balls off and then break down and cry. She wouldn't let her school work suffer for a guy who hurt her. Her middle finger to Peeves would have been to move on with her life despite the fact that she was in pain. Hermione is a planner and she would have never left her life to fate the way that she did in this fic. Now one could argue that she was experiencing love for the first time but I personally don't think love would have muddled her logical brain quite as much as it did in this story.
Ginny strikes me as the type of character who would embarrass both Harry and Luna without feeling ashamed about it in the end. She also doesn't strike me as the type of person to just let Luna have Harry. To me, If Ginny wanted Harry, she would have gone through great lengths to have him. She does have a fiery personality after all.
That being said, for the way you had the story framed, I can see why you wrote your characters the way that you did (considering that I hate Harry and Ginny being paired together, I guess I shouldn't complain too much lol) and it still made the story good for me (obvious since I'm sitting here typing out an epic review for you lol). I didn't mention it before because I didn't want how I interpreted the characters to sway how you wrote the story. I loved what you did with them even if its not the way I would have written it.
And despite my bitching (hee hee hee), all of your chapters came in a timely manner. As someone who was dumb enough to write a nine hundred page fanfiction as a way to ease into the fandom, I know how hard it can be to keep going consistently when the end is near.
My only real criticism for the story is that the ending was too sudden (well for me it was too sudden). I felt it could have been eased into with a little more plot.
But despite me being nit picky, you wrote a very good story and I can't wait to see what else you have up your sleeves. You have a true fan here.
Some pairings I would love to see by you (caution, there are some squee parings in here as well) are: Hermione/Arthur Weasley, Hermione/Kingsley, Ginny/Kingsley, Ginny/Lucius, Ginny/Snape, Luna/Arthur Weasley, Ginny/Arthur Weasley, Luna/Snape, Luna/Lucius, Luna/Kingsley, Luna/Remus, Luna/Sirius Black, Ginny/Sirius Black, Ginny/Remus, Hermione/Mr.Lovegood ... and that's all I can really think about right now (did I squeek you out?? lol)
So, as a closing to this long ass review--good job!!! I love your style and can't wait to see more!
Until then!
Love,hugs, and kisses
koolgirl18
P.S. (Yeah, like this needs to be any longer) If you ever need help with anything, simply email me. If you go to my profile you will find my email there. Make sure you put "Fanfiction" in the heading so I can know not to delete you.
First of all, I love that you had the guts to post a story with a rare and strange pairing such as this. Not every writer can put their kinkiest ideas out there without fearing the rejection. Its a harsh world out there in fanfiction--and you are one of the few survivors.
The flow of the story was good. The smut scenes were amazing, incredibly nice. The dynamics between Peeves and Hermione was believable though I personally thought your Hermione was a little too mild tempered. I also thought your Ginny was too mild tempered as well. In my interpretation of the characters, Hermione doesn't seem the type to just let Peeves go after he hurt her. She would hex his balls off and then break down and cry. She wouldn't let her school work suffer for a guy who hurt her. Her middle finger to Peeves would have been to move on with her life despite the fact that she was in pain. Hermione is a planner and she would have never left her life to fate the way that she did in this fic. Now one could argue that she was experiencing love for the first time but I personally don't think love would have muddled her logical brain quite as much as it did in this story.
Ginny strikes me as the type of character who would embarrass both Harry and Luna without feeling ashamed about it in the end. She also doesn't strike me as the type of person to just let Luna have Harry. To me, If Ginny wanted Harry, she would have gone through great lengths to have him. She does have a fiery personality after all.
That being said, for the way you had the story framed, I can see why you wrote your characters the way that you did (considering that I hate Harry and Ginny being paired together, I guess I shouldn't complain too much lol) and it still made the story good for me (obvious since I'm sitting here typing out an epic review for you lol). I didn't mention it before because I didn't want how I interpreted the characters to sway how you wrote the story. I loved what you did with them even if its not the way I would have written it.
And despite my bitching (hee hee hee), all of your chapters came in a timely manner. As someone who was dumb enough to write a nine hundred page fanfiction as a way to ease into the fandom, I know how hard it can be to keep going consistently when the end is near.
My only real criticism for the story is that the ending was too sudden (well for me it was too sudden). I felt it could have been eased into with a little more plot.
But despite me being nit picky, you wrote a very good story and I can't wait to see what else you have up your sleeves. You have a true fan here.
Some pairings I would love to see by you (caution, there are some squee parings in here as well) are: Hermione/Arthur Weasley, Hermione/Kingsley, Ginny/Kingsley, Ginny/Lucius, Ginny/Snape, Luna/Arthur Weasley, Ginny/Arthur Weasley, Luna/Snape, Luna/Lucius, Luna/Kingsley, Luna/Remus, Luna/Sirius Black, Ginny/Sirius Black, Ginny/Remus, Hermione/Mr.Lovegood ... and that's all I can really think about right now (did I squeek you out?? lol)
So, as a closing to this long ass review--good job!!! I love your style and can't wait to see more!
Until then!
Love,hugs, and kisses
koolgirl18
P.S. (Yeah, like this needs to be any longer) If you ever need help with anything, simply email me. If you go to my profile you will find my email there. Make sure you put "Fanfiction" in the heading so I can know not to delete you.
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
EPILOGUE EPILOGUE EPILOGUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This was a great ending to a wonderful story:)