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March 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I don't check enough - Just saw you wrote a second chapter. Nice to see it's gone past the 750 word mark in hits, Looks like the people who enjoyed the first chapter rushed back for more... come on and review, folks, the water's lovely!
You've built well on the first part in the second. Harry seems to me more like a delusional person who thinks they're from a world of wizards, living hand to mouth, than a true wizard. It's almost like he doesn't want to raise the 'wand' and summon the bus because the failure to arrive would shatter the fantasy. Then again, that attitude also comes as a cover for extreme trauma... It's mysterious, and good with it. I'd feel bad for the hipster, but I think we've all wanted to batter them at one point or another.
You've built well on the first part in the second. Harry seems to me more like a delusional person who thinks they're from a world of wizards, living hand to mouth, than a true wizard. It's almost like he doesn't want to raise the 'wand' and summon the bus because the failure to arrive would shatter the fantasy. Then again, that attitude also comes as a cover for extreme trauma... It's mysterious, and good with it. I'd feel bad for the hipster, but I think we've all wanted to batter them at one point or another.
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March 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
First of all: Thank you most kindly for taking the request and doing something with it! It was an off the top of my head thought in the forum shoutbox that just about anything would be read in the Harry Potter fandom, including quietly waiting for a bus - 337 hits so far does prove it :D
Second of all: Good job! Waiting quietly considering to call the bus Harry is an angst-ridden mess, and that comes across very well. Harry seemingly gripped by PTSD seems a realistic follow on from the novel canon too.
Hope this leads to you getting back into writing a lot more again!
Second of all: Good job! Waiting quietly considering to call the bus Harry is an angst-ridden mess, and that comes across very well. Harry seemingly gripped by PTSD seems a realistic follow on from the novel canon too.
Hope this leads to you getting back into writing a lot more again!