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April 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
so, the others are just sorta, fumbling their way thru Harry's healing.
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April 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So, I'm thinking you're either in med school or a psych major. Am I close? That was an incredibly detailed and realistic account of the after-effects of a trauma. Once again, it was heartbreaking to read him go through that again, and his memory of Lucius knife-play in the dream was absolutely terrifying. But his complete freak-out when Hermione gets too close....this is going to be hard for him to overcome, and it's going to be tough on all three of them to get past the memory of that particular event.
I thought that the way Harry gets indignant at how Ron and Hermione manhandle him (perfect choice of word) was so in-character, as well. He's never been a touchy bloke to begin with, and I would think that people touching him without his permission was not something he cared for even before the hell he went through.
I love how Hermione and Ron have become so quick to nurse him and take care of him, though. I feel like it's partly in gratitude, but of course they want their friend to get better as quickly as he's able. Still, Hermione slipping his pain potion into his soup is just the kind of thing she'd do, even though it was lovely the way she reassured Harry the second time she attempted to give him his potions.
She's getting pretty regular about kissing him goodnight, isn't she?
And I'm so glad you didn't end the story at Harry waking up! I'd say you've got LOADS more to say with this story. Hell, it's just beginning, if you ask me. The trio healing together---that's going to take more than a few days....and it's a topic well worth exploring. Not too many people write about it.
Excellent work, Greycie, although I suspect that accolade is just getting repetitive now.
Oh, and Lucius is dead....whoa, didn't see that coming.
I thought that the way Harry gets indignant at how Ron and Hermione manhandle him (perfect choice of word) was so in-character, as well. He's never been a touchy bloke to begin with, and I would think that people touching him without his permission was not something he cared for even before the hell he went through.
I love how Hermione and Ron have become so quick to nurse him and take care of him, though. I feel like it's partly in gratitude, but of course they want their friend to get better as quickly as he's able. Still, Hermione slipping his pain potion into his soup is just the kind of thing she'd do, even though it was lovely the way she reassured Harry the second time she attempted to give him his potions.
She's getting pretty regular about kissing him goodnight, isn't she?
And I'm so glad you didn't end the story at Harry waking up! I'd say you've got LOADS more to say with this story. Hell, it's just beginning, if you ask me. The trio healing together---that's going to take more than a few days....and it's a topic well worth exploring. Not too many people write about it.
Excellent work, Greycie, although I suspect that accolade is just getting repetitive now.
Oh, and Lucius is dead....whoa, didn't see that coming.
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April 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, and a few more things.
I felt so bad for poor Dobby after he'd startled Harry, but I love that you've included him.
And when Harry looked down and saw what he'd done to his arm, the shame that runs through him---so accurate.
And finally, the past tense of drag is dragged.
I felt so bad for poor Dobby after he'd startled Harry, but I love that you've included him.
And when Harry looked down and saw what he'd done to his arm, the shame that runs through him---so accurate.
And finally, the past tense of drag is dragged.
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April 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Not sure why I clicked on this, I don't generally read "trio" stories, and gang rape isn't my idea of fun either, but I'm glad I did. Truthfully each chapter has been stronger and stronger. By the time you got to the rape of Hermione, that was powerfully well done, and at that point you'd really brought the story up beyond just Harry-abused-by-Deatheaters stuff that's so prevalent on this site, really spelled the whole thing out with emotional depth and horror. And each chapter particularly since their escape you've ramped it up, until this chapter just nailed it, emotionally so intense from so many different directions. By the time Harry opened his eyes and Ron welcomed him back to consciousness with that unexpected-yet-thoroughly appropriate greeting - well, I'm totally emotionally invested in your story.
I saw on your profile that this is your first story. It's a really solid debut. Very much looking forward to the updates.
I saw on your profile that this is your first story. It's a really solid debut. Very much looking forward to the updates.
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April 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Well done! The scene with the three of them in bed was hot and touching. I'm a sucker for trio-esque interactions (although that's just my interpretation) lol. I really liked the end because its showed the bond between them is so deep and loving. I'm glad to see Harry's pov is up next. I'm anxiously awaiting Ron's take on the matter.
I hope you don't think I'm some kind of stalker because I comment on every chapter. I'm just in love with the story. Lol.
I hope you don't think I'm some kind of stalker because I comment on every chapter. I'm just in love with the story. Lol.
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April 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am absolutely obsessed with this story! I love the emotions. I love the trio bond. I just love everything! Cannot wait to read more!!
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Harry just never really catches a break does he but it's cute about ron and hermionie
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
No words, really.
The whole chapter was beautiful...honest and true. I feel quite devastated.
The whole chapter was beautiful...honest and true. I feel quite devastated.
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April 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yea another chapter!!! I like the pacing. I agree with the other reviewer who said that they need a break after all they had been through. I'm really really anxious to see what happens when Harry become fully conscience. I love the supportive Ron in this fic. It's almost like he's still trying to redeem himself from his desertion. Well I really hope that update will come soon. :p
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April 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I don't think that every chapter needs to be chock full of action. You've given us more than enough for the time being; I think it's a good idea to spend a little quiet time with our heroes. Hermione and Ron have to decompress after what they've been through, and continue to deal with in concern to Harry's health. I love how tender Hermione is with Harry as she dresses his wounds. In focusing on the way she nurses him, we can plainly see that she doesn't hold Harry at fault for the rape. I also love the way Ron remembers to watch out for Hermione's well-being even as he's fighting to take care of Harry. You make him such an admirable character; just the type of person whom you would want in a crisis. He internalizes trauma the same way that Harry does, but being in a big family has taught him how to focus on caring for others around him instead of just withdrawing into himself. It's what keeps him going.
As the poster above me noted, it's a bit odd that the adults are keeping away from Grimmauld solely based on Hermione's request, especially since Harry is so ill. I would have expected Mrs. Weasley to plonk herself on the premises and never leave until Harry was okay again. But in the earlier chapter, I like how you had Hermione play the adult to a shocked and guilty Remus. The role reversal shows how much the trio have become adults themselves, certainly after what they just had to prevail against. Their innocence is long gone, and I think the Order members realize this. It's part of the tragedy, really.
Hope to see the next chapter up soon.
As the poster above me noted, it's a bit odd that the adults are keeping away from Grimmauld solely based on Hermione's request, especially since Harry is so ill. I would have expected Mrs. Weasley to plonk herself on the premises and never leave until Harry was okay again. But in the earlier chapter, I like how you had Hermione play the adult to a shocked and guilty Remus. The role reversal shows how much the trio have become adults themselves, certainly after what they just had to prevail against. Their innocence is long gone, and I think the Order members realize this. It's part of the tragedy, really.
Hope to see the next chapter up soon.