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for World in Pieces

by Lomonaaeren

schedule January 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I was late for work today and it was all YOUR fault!...because I just HAD to start chapter 3! *sigh* Oh well, it was just too much of a temptation. ANYWAY... I love how Snape is really picking up on what Harry says (and doesn't say) and is so interested if trying to figure out why he's different from the Potter that he knew. I like the idea of him being a mentor to Harry. Maybe he could go back with Harry... there is a void there. Now... on to read more!
schedule January 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
well bummer, thats right up there on the not good thing list. i don't think sev can combat a childhood full of abuse... at least not by himself... where the heck are they supposed to find ppl to trust though? it's not as if they have a chance to go looking.
looking forward to what's bound to be a heck of a fire fight in har's mind.
person Zip
schedule January 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Update, yay! But, I am kind of confused, because I thought that Harry scar is healed from original world and there is no Voldemort anymore in it. I would like some explanation, because I got perplexed from moment that Harry mentioned, that he will use connection for information- I thought that he have just prophercy one now, not scar one, too. And why V. attacked so suddenly and that way? But such cliffhanger, damn. oh, and I like that talk about Dursleys, that you make it sound like real problem, intesified a emotion of reluctance to speak about that.
schedule December 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
*goes into frothy, incoherent rage along with Har. How dare he! HOW DARE HE! that senile, misguided, god complex, old GOAT man! Oh pls, PLS tell me he at least meets a grisly end. So far, his old, dark lord ish ways are making a come back. As someone famous once said "urge to kill... RISING!"
Harry in any of his incarnations, is NOT a throw away item! Though it does amuse me that he can't handle a Gryffindor Har. *smirk.
Slyth Har probably suicided (if he did suicide) to escape the old goats scheming.

a few side Q's. did Slyth Har have the same 'helping ppl' thing this Har does and will Har and Sev be getting any more allies in this world. Cause so far it seems very them against the world.
person Zip
schedule December 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
AHHH, update, yes. I don t have time, but I still read this, of course, silly me. This is wonderful chapter, for a moment, I thought that Dumbledor wanted to kill Harry, and maybe want just that. Harry of course have to save everyone, even another self. What a demented resolution, what a wonderfull reaction, sweet, scary, insane.... unexpected twist, just Harry.
Dialogs triggered in me reaction, that I so love when reading - emotions, and I imagined, what I would say, or think, if I was Snape or Harry and then read what they relly did. Sorry for grammar, I wanted to leave comment, so I wrote this in hurry and didn t check. Another chapter, which leaves me with wanting more. How will look lot of them, when Harry says NO? I cant wait, especially for Dumbledores one. :D
person kyandoru
schedule December 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hooray! I am so happy you updated! And I am happy Harry made contact with back home. Now the question is how are they going to take it when they hear he wants to stay and fight. And what's going to happen with Snape when Harry goes back? Is he going to go to Harry's world or stay behind and pick up the pieces? I hope this Dumbledore gets what's coming to him.
person Alice
schedule December 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Omg, I think this is one of the best chapter in the story. U have out done yourself. No wonder it take so long. Love it, going to read it again now.
person kyandoru
schedule October 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am so happy you updated again. Are you losing inspiration for this story or just have too much for others? I know you don't abandon stories, I just wish you would update this one more frequently. I love all the twists and turns you are taking with the plot! I love how you are laying it out. The interactions between Dumbledore and everyone elso are also really interesting. Please update more soon!
person heartstar
schedule October 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yes Now does harry trust him or not?
person Zip
schedule October 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow, This chapter was really good. The anticipation for what will happen next is even more pronouncing than before. To think, that you used mainly Snape and Harry, just two characters, to create this ...tension. You worked Harry to position, when even I, from Snape side, was wondering, if "sacriface victim" is not in reality villain. And I can t wait to see, what Dumbledore thinks about Harry. You play it so well. I hope that we could see headmaster intentions, althrought I don t mind to see them much much later ->unknow Dumbledore give me such a kick. Thank you for update, you made my day... eh, night :D.