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by Lomonaaeren

schedule April 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I found this story last week and have enjoyed it so much. It was so well written and imaginative that I had a hard time putting it down just to go to work. If you are keeping a list, I would love to know when or if you do a sequel. Thank you so much for taking the time to write it.
person BAFan
schedule September 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Epilogue

Sigh...wonderful ending to an almost perfect story! "Almost" because "perfect" would have included something overtly romantic at the end, such as a kiss. ;-) Glad to know you're not entirely discounting the possibility of a sequel, however remote it may be; this story just begs to be continued, IMO. Severus's thoughts on the differences between him and his counterpart were spot on, as were the reasons he gave to McGonagall as to why he shouldn't teach at Hogwarts. Ron's attitude towards him was amusing, and representative of a great number of the students' and staff's thoughts, I should think.

I had some other comments to make, but as usual they've flown out of my head. Oh! Not sure I get what happened with the Elder Wand at Ollivander's. Did Harry's new wand somehow "cure" it of its less desirable characteristics? That seemed to be what Ollivander was hinting at. Anyway, congratulations on another great story completed! I look forward to your next one.
person BAFan
schedule September 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 24

Harry's safely home, thank goodness! I hope Snape doesn't have too terrible a time settling into that world. Looking forward to the epilogue. Any chance that the NoSex tag might get relaxed a bit in it? *hopeful face* Any chance of a sequel? *even more hopeful face*
schedule September 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Yeah!!! *doing a happy dance*I am so so so so so glad you are going to have the epilogue :)

And I think having Draco as the anchor was a perfect choice. He was the closest to their situation and other than Snape he learned the most about our Harry. Awesome awesome awesome. Can't wait to see how Snape adjusts to his new world and reputation and how people react to him.
schedule September 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
That was so awesome! Awesome awesome awesome awesome AWESOME! That was so perfectly balanced how destroying the geode effected both Voldemort and Dumbledore. And everything that Harry said to Dumbledore was dead on... nothing is so painful as the truth about oneself and Harry laid out Dumbledore's actions, motivations, and oh I loved this part... his INEFFECTIVENESS so clearly. It was truly a beautiful thing.

And I loved how both Draco and Severus responded to Dumbledore. Draco finally had closure and will be able to move on after this and Severus showed his own reaction is the best way possible. Dumbledore really has no place to belong now and that is perfect.

You do realize that this story has perfect pacing, plot and characterization. Looking forward to everything else you have planned for this story and by all means... don't leave anything out lol.
schedule September 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh and sorry I didn't read and review earlier. I read updates in order and as of yesterday I was back on Aug. 22nd updates! Anyway... happy writing :)
schedule August 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Of COURSE Harry would never leave Severus alone to be tortured and killed by Voldemort. Did Snape really believe that he would?

Now I wonder if Dumbledore and company will show up after Harry has defeated Voldemort or if he will be there to witness it. It will serve him right either way because he thought he was so important that nothing could be done without him or his guidance so it will be nice to see him eat crow.
person BAFan
schedule August 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 22

Ooh, it's getting exciting now! And, duh, Severus should have known that Harry wouldn't leave if he were in trouble. I liked that Harry recognized it wasn't really Lily in his dream, but I'm worried about what other information Voldemort might be able to use against him.

Waiting eagerly for the next update. Do you know how many chapters are left?
schedule August 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I see... so when the horcrux is destroyed they whatever spell does the deed will snap back like a rubber band to destroy the rest of his soul. Very cool. Those eggs were pretty cool too lol
schedule July 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
*head banging on desk* I felt like Harry when Snake was explaining about the reverse horcrux when he told Harry he wouldn't understand lol. I'm not sure what they plan to do with it because it has just the one piece of Voldemort but it was cool how Severus got the piece to leave Voldemort.

And I'm patient... I don't mind waiting for those reactions of the people back home :)