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February 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so that's how long it took for me before I got stuck :P Half an hour... Oh, well, now I've logged out from msn as well so I can read without getting interrupted! Finding a nice way to lay... check! A bit bad writing though... oh, well.
Ha! Hermione is right about one thing at least, if there is anyone in the need of a good spanking, it's him, that's for sure. Oh... I can see it before me, Voldemort's lily white arse turning all red as Hermione's hand slaps down on it... hm, I think I heard something? Is there someone at the window? Oh. no.
Several days later a body was discovered in the lake...
Tihi.
Oh, heavens... the conversations you can have with clever people. The sex you can have while having a clever conversation... ah... Personally, I've never got the whole "she felt so much pleasure her brain stopped working". My brain is active through the whole thing. Reflecting on what my partner does wrong, mostly and how I shall change it. Although, somehow I don't think you will make Hermione experience that with Mr Riddle. Tihi. Oh, well. And Hermione as an addict. Hehe... I wonder what Voldemort will do to make her stop that.
"how genteel the expression was" Genteel? Is that some form of the word gentle I have neglected to learn or an error? For some reason, I think the first one... darn.
Haha, with they starting to talk about Slughorn, it just makes me think... if you can discuss a teacher you have both had, then the age difference isn't that big of a deal. :)
"Me and my big mouth, I
Ha! Hermione is right about one thing at least, if there is anyone in the need of a good spanking, it's him, that's for sure. Oh... I can see it before me, Voldemort's lily white arse turning all red as Hermione's hand slaps down on it... hm, I think I heard something? Is there someone at the window? Oh. no.
Several days later a body was discovered in the lake...
Tihi.
Oh, heavens... the conversations you can have with clever people. The sex you can have while having a clever conversation... ah... Personally, I've never got the whole "she felt so much pleasure her brain stopped working". My brain is active through the whole thing. Reflecting on what my partner does wrong, mostly and how I shall change it. Although, somehow I don't think you will make Hermione experience that with Mr Riddle. Tihi. Oh, well. And Hermione as an addict. Hehe... I wonder what Voldemort will do to make her stop that.
"how genteel the expression was" Genteel? Is that some form of the word gentle I have neglected to learn or an error? For some reason, I think the first one... darn.
Haha, with they starting to talk about Slughorn, it just makes me think... if you can discuss a teacher you have both had, then the age difference isn't that big of a deal. :)
"Me and my big mouth, I
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February 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Okej, just reposting that long nooo review again. My webreader also got all stretched out. Not nice.
*Bawling* I had written a lengthy analyse of chapter three which had taken half an hour and then the fucking page decided that backspace meant going back a page and it all disappeared *crying* I hate when internet does that. Not only does I have to copy everything before I try to post it, apparently I have to copy everything before I have to delete a word. Which is hard because I do that without really thinking since I write so quickly and if I write a mistake I just delete without thinking. Like now... BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH. And now I have to go as well... okay, when I come back I'll try to summarise what I wrote.
Or well, I can begin with the first thing I noticed. The whole "it was so wrong, yet it felt so right" -monologue Hermione have at the beginning of the chapter... that feels so overused by so many authors. I can understand why you use it because many understand what it means and it doesn't take up a lot of space to write it. However, it would also make sense if Hermione completely denied why she was acting like she was. That she lied to herself and said that "I wear my battle scar proudly" and that she only wore a scar because Ron would be so annoyingly worried if he saw it. And then she could after some time realise why he had such an effect on her. In fact, later in the chapter when you have the whole analyse on how charismatic Voldemort is from Hermione's POV, it totally makes sense to why she is so submissive. So if you are to write something similar again, you could ask yourself if you really need the whole "so wrong yet so right" because you can say it without having to spell it out so well anyway. However, I know that some readers just never get it but... well, that is just something you have to weight off sometimes... anyway, it's completely up to you of course. Just pointing out my observation ^^
Oh, and I absolutely loved the whole scene where you applied the: "the way to a man's heart is through his stomach"! LOVED IT! Voldemort is in looooooove ;) Okay, not in love like normal people, but his kind of love. He has decided that he rather have Hermione alive and won't kill her as a first resort. She is worthy of his time and attention. Which we looooooooove. So YAY!
Okej, so there was something else I wroth rather lengthy about... right, the fact that Hermione have a trouble getting pregnant. A lot of author have her having problem with it (myself included ^^) and also states that her parents had problems with it. I wonder who spread that seed over the fanfiction world, because I can't recall JK mentioning it... or has she? I mean, it isn't at all impossible that it is the fact. However, it could as well be that Hermione's parents didn't want more than one child because they are busy with work as well. Ah, well, it doesn't matter really. For this story it is completely valid that Hermione should have trouble conceiving with Ron... mehe... I wonder if the problem is with Ron, thought, or with Hermione. I'm sure Voldemort will be able to fix it... or maybe his sperm is just as stubborn and determined as he is so they can stick to everything? ;) Hihi... Okay, not I can read the rest of the chapter. I think I've managed to rewrite all I lost... a bit differently, though. Now I copy and save...
Oh, right, I also love the fact that Voldemort likes that Hermione isn't fooled by him :) That is such a nice little add. I understand him, though, it's boring never to be challenged ;)
*Bawling* I had written a lengthy analyse of chapter three which had taken half an hour and then the fucking page decided that backspace meant going back a page and it all disappeared *crying* I hate when internet does that. Not only does I have to copy everything before I try to post it, apparently I have to copy everything before I have to delete a word. Which is hard because I do that without really thinking since I write so quickly and if I write a mistake I just delete without thinking. Like now... BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH. And now I have to go as well... okay, when I come back I'll try to summarise what I wrote.
Or well, I can begin with the first thing I noticed. The whole "it was so wrong, yet it felt so right" -monologue Hermione have at the beginning of the chapter... that feels so overused by so many authors. I can understand why you use it because many understand what it means and it doesn't take up a lot of space to write it. However, it would also make sense if Hermione completely denied why she was acting like she was. That she lied to herself and said that "I wear my battle scar proudly" and that she only wore a scar because Ron would be so annoyingly worried if he saw it. And then she could after some time realise why he had such an effect on her. In fact, later in the chapter when you have the whole analyse on how charismatic Voldemort is from Hermione's POV, it totally makes sense to why she is so submissive. So if you are to write something similar again, you could ask yourself if you really need the whole "so wrong yet so right" because you can say it without having to spell it out so well anyway. However, I know that some readers just never get it but... well, that is just something you have to weight off sometimes... anyway, it's completely up to you of course. Just pointing out my observation ^^
Oh, and I absolutely loved the whole scene where you applied the: "the way to a man's heart is through his stomach"! LOVED IT! Voldemort is in looooooove ;) Okay, not in love like normal people, but his kind of love. He has decided that he rather have Hermione alive and won't kill her as a first resort. She is worthy of his time and attention. Which we looooooooove. So YAY!
Okej, so there was something else I wroth rather lengthy about... right, the fact that Hermione have a trouble getting pregnant. A lot of author have her having problem with it (myself included ^^) and also states that her parents had problems with it. I wonder who spread that seed over the fanfiction world, because I can't recall JK mentioning it... or has she? I mean, it isn't at all impossible that it is the fact. However, it could as well be that Hermione's parents didn't want more than one child because they are busy with work as well. Ah, well, it doesn't matter really. For this story it is completely valid that Hermione should have trouble conceiving with Ron... mehe... I wonder if the problem is with Ron, thought, or with Hermione. I'm sure Voldemort will be able to fix it... or maybe his sperm is just as stubborn and determined as he is so they can stick to everything? ;) Hihi... Okay, not I can read the rest of the chapter. I think I've managed to rewrite all I lost... a bit differently, though. Now I copy and save...
Oh, right, I also love the fact that Voldemort likes that Hermione isn't fooled by him :) That is such a nice little add. I understand him, though, it's boring never to be challenged ;)
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February 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Major Dissatisfaction? That isn't brothering well for our heroin...
Ron sitting in front of the telly and Hermione doing homework. Hey, that sounds like me and my brother! I wonder if Ron is watching wrestling as well... too bad I don't get so fuck any of my teachers. Boho, life is so unfair and all that. I hope Voldemort will be pleased with her at least.
Gaaaah, I know he would leave her hanging! All that nice clever conversation (which made little sense to me, I may add. Bell Jar, who? Although, I think that was the point. I understand, they were all clever there and he used some dark ritual with something out from it to be young and handsome again, why should I concentrate about that when there is a half-naked Hermione right there? Oh, that's right, I seldom complement you how utterly sexy you make Hermione. I would want her as a girlfriend, seriously. Great cook, clever and able to do as she is told with the right encouragement. Yep, that sounds like a girl for me!) and then the fingering and kissing and of course he would leave her hanging. I feel for her. Poor dear.
Wait, the hummingbird gets younger and into an egg and then gets old again. Does that mean Voldemort will become younger and younger? Naaah, somehow I doubt that...
Oh, so this was the Hermione-drinking-scene you mentioned ;) Haha, nice, nice. And I think she may be on to something with the whole Voldemort-not-being-able-to-get-it-up. Yes, that makes sense. In canon that is, he has already got hard for her in this fic ^^ oh, well... Haha, loved the small part where Hermione flirted with Harry, the poor fellow. I wonder how his conversation with Ron will go... am looking forward to reading that! However, now it's so very late again and I'm tired... talk to you tomorrow... or later today ;) Toodles.
Ron sitting in front of the telly and Hermione doing homework. Hey, that sounds like me and my brother! I wonder if Ron is watching wrestling as well... too bad I don't get so fuck any of my teachers. Boho, life is so unfair and all that. I hope Voldemort will be pleased with her at least.
Gaaaah, I know he would leave her hanging! All that nice clever conversation (which made little sense to me, I may add. Bell Jar, who? Although, I think that was the point. I understand, they were all clever there and he used some dark ritual with something out from it to be young and handsome again, why should I concentrate about that when there is a half-naked Hermione right there? Oh, that's right, I seldom complement you how utterly sexy you make Hermione. I would want her as a girlfriend, seriously. Great cook, clever and able to do as she is told with the right encouragement. Yep, that sounds like a girl for me!) and then the fingering and kissing and of course he would leave her hanging. I feel for her. Poor dear.
Wait, the hummingbird gets younger and into an egg and then gets old again. Does that mean Voldemort will become younger and younger? Naaah, somehow I doubt that...
Oh, so this was the Hermione-drinking-scene you mentioned ;) Haha, nice, nice. And I think she may be on to something with the whole Voldemort-not-being-able-to-get-it-up. Yes, that makes sense. In canon that is, he has already got hard for her in this fic ^^ oh, well... Haha, loved the small part where Hermione flirted with Harry, the poor fellow. I wonder how his conversation with Ron will go... am looking forward to reading that! However, now it's so very late again and I'm tired... talk to you tomorrow... or later today ;) Toodles.
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February 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I have major sympathies for Hermione right now. Also, I feel that mentioning the bit about hiding her undies in her pocket is going to come back and bite her in the ass....aka Tom will be slightly peeved. She just needs to dump Ron on his lousy bum, did I mention that I am so happy you made him sterile? THANK GOD. I am pretty sure I forgot to say that earlier, but I emitted a visible sigh of relief when I knew for sure Hermione wasn't having any of Ron's babies....phew.
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February 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
LOLOLOL
ahhhh poor Hermione. XD No shagging for you, naughty girl! -wags finger- SIIIIGH Riddle's not going to be very happy when he finds out that darling Hermione hid underwear in her pockets. I'm debating though - would punishment be getting shagged or not? I'm leaning towards not right now. >< just because Riddle would probably get off on Hermione's frustration. :DDD Although I'm not surprised that Hermione would disobey Voldemort. Probably hoping the punishment would be rather...extreme. Plus, she always had book smarts, but Harry solved a lot of the common sense stuffs.
I think....you should kill Ron in this fic. :) And Riddle should have the honor of killing him. PSSH It's not like Ron's a very helpful person anyways. I doubt Hermione would care. :P
I think I'm brain dead at this time...So this is a short review. Update soon!
ahhhh poor Hermione. XD No shagging for you, naughty girl! -wags finger- SIIIIGH Riddle's not going to be very happy when he finds out that darling Hermione hid underwear in her pockets. I'm debating though - would punishment be getting shagged or not? I'm leaning towards not right now. >< just because Riddle would probably get off on Hermione's frustration. :DDD Although I'm not surprised that Hermione would disobey Voldemort. Probably hoping the punishment would be rather...extreme. Plus, she always had book smarts, but Harry solved a lot of the common sense stuffs.
I think....you should kill Ron in this fic. :) And Riddle should have the honor of killing him. PSSH It's not like Ron's a very helpful person anyways. I doubt Hermione would care. :P
I think I'm brain dead at this time...So this is a short review. Update soon!
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February 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hiya there!
First of all: This is the very same Zarina from ff.net, meaning the very same annoying German who built you an altar and doesn't review your stories half as often as she'd like to.
Yup, I've decided to read your stories here as well. I've discovered that very often, the lemons in your story are rather plot-relevant, and since I've been a legal/adult member of society for some time now, I don't see any reason to NOT read them as well.
Since I don't have toooo much time now (we talked about finals, didn't we? Well, here in Germany, it's not just one week, but three to four weeks of plain torture, PLUS the final finals - the Abitur - coming end of March >.<), I'd just like to tell you again how much I love your story. I thoroughly enjoyed Tom's mind games and teasing, and I don't think Hermione minds his demands as much as she'd like to *hehe*. I also like the little twist with Ron's... ehm... little swimmers. While I do still have several intact pages at the end of my copy of DH, they have only been read once and I'm not good with remembering unimportant details, so I'll trust you to have everything in order *giggle* You'll get a more detailed review on chapters 3, 4 and 5 (and maybe 6? ^^) once I can actually have some peace and quiet to not only read, but also comment.
I do want to you to know, though, that I ADORE how you answer some reviews. Take Yw's for example. I almost fell off my chair laughing. Thank you so much for that. I also liked the shortly-changed summary on ff.net. Shame on you, for spreading such vile and icky works, 'happy' was so right to put you in your place! *lol* The nerve of some of those people, jeeeeeeez.
I wish you the very best of sunday evenings and the most success on whatever real-life business you have to attend to. Be strong and know, us faithful readers feel with you. Real life, how gruesome...
-Anja
First of all: This is the very same Zarina from ff.net, meaning the very same annoying German who built you an altar and doesn't review your stories half as often as she'd like to.
Yup, I've decided to read your stories here as well. I've discovered that very often, the lemons in your story are rather plot-relevant, and since I've been a legal/adult member of society for some time now, I don't see any reason to NOT read them as well.
Since I don't have toooo much time now (we talked about finals, didn't we? Well, here in Germany, it's not just one week, but three to four weeks of plain torture, PLUS the final finals - the Abitur - coming end of March >.<), I'd just like to tell you again how much I love your story. I thoroughly enjoyed Tom's mind games and teasing, and I don't think Hermione minds his demands as much as she'd like to *hehe*. I also like the little twist with Ron's... ehm... little swimmers. While I do still have several intact pages at the end of my copy of DH, they have only been read once and I'm not good with remembering unimportant details, so I'll trust you to have everything in order *giggle* You'll get a more detailed review on chapters 3, 4 and 5 (and maybe 6? ^^) once I can actually have some peace and quiet to not only read, but also comment.
I do want to you to know, though, that I ADORE how you answer some reviews. Take Yw's for example. I almost fell off my chair laughing. Thank you so much for that. I also liked the shortly-changed summary on ff.net. Shame on you, for spreading such vile and icky works, 'happy' was so right to put you in your place! *lol* The nerve of some of those people, jeeeeeeez.
I wish you the very best of sunday evenings and the most success on whatever real-life business you have to attend to. Be strong and know, us faithful readers feel with you. Real life, how gruesome...
-Anja
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February 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh!!! You and Tom...are such a tease!!!!
Hermoine needs Tom to be dominate, she is too much in control of everything else in her life. I understand her need to just release all that control to someone else for just a little while. Plus Tom is a very ABLE dominate that can control her with such little effort on his part...the perfect dominate!
I wonder how Harry will handle Ron and when will he discover that so much of Hermoine's ramblings were about, none other than the Dark Lord, himself? That should prove a very interesting conversation.
Hermoine needs Tom to be dominate, she is too much in control of everything else in her life. I understand her need to just release all that control to someone else for just a little while. Plus Tom is a very ABLE dominate that can control her with such little effort on his part...the perfect dominate!
I wonder how Harry will handle Ron and when will he discover that so much of Hermoine's ramblings were about, none other than the Dark Lord, himself? That should prove a very interesting conversation.
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February 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the update! I love this story! Drunk Hermione is a trip. I love her new nickname: Lord Softy Weiner. She should totally try that one on him and see how he reacts. He really is such a tease!
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February 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yayyy, you're writing again!!
I'm REALLY enjoying The Prisoner, and can't wait for some smut!! Are you planning on updating The Apprentice any time soon?
I'm REALLY enjoying The Prisoner, and can't wait for some smut!! Are you planning on updating The Apprentice any time soon?
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February 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Another lovely chapter! It was deliciously sexy too.....so that was an added bonus. I am eager to see what happens in the following chapter :) I totally read this at 1am on my phone when I couldn't sleep. It was a happy surprise that it was updated! Did I mention Tom is sexy? I did? Just checking.