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for A Traitors Heart

by inuren

schedule March 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Go Harry! Go Harry!
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Now that's a chapter. Thank You! ^_^ Snape still needs his ass kicked even more, Dumbly's still an idiot and needs to be bitch slaped to knock some sense into him. And if the Weasleys are so dense that they think Harry will just say, "Hey, mate, great to be back," well they all need a reality check and to be bitch slapped as well. I would like to see in the next chapter maybe more dialogue between Harry and the other characters. This chapter was important and necessary, but now we need to get into some actual dialogue and interaction with the other characters. That's just my opinion ^_^
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
is harry going to look for his kids?
and dumble dim sheesh. could he be any dumber? after the hell Harry has been thru... he needs healing and i hope someone will help with that.
person dominique1
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
harry needs to get a hold of ministry of magic and to be freed from albus check in finance and find his kids and destroy albus and voldy as well as everyone that hurt him he needs to get with viktor krum or marcus flint and move the fuck on because draco a ass want more
person dominique1
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i would also like harry to go off on them to tell them what he suffer in prison while they lived their life at least the rape's i could just imagine their face as he describe what being lock up was like and maybe his kids need to stay hidden for now that pain that they each cause no forgiveness. to make the malfoys and severus feel like shit as well as everyone else and draco having the balls to be in his room
person dominique1
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i don't care how much draco loves harry it wasn't enough. besides if harry forgive draco than he might as well forgive everyone i say you should have a vote who harry should be with none of the weasley because of what they did i say give him someone as powerful or more powerful than the malfoys and who believed in him i vote for viktor krum because he older and famous as well as rich and sexy i think the best revenge against draco would be that he know about his kids but can never claim them or have them i think the carrier should have all the rights as long as their the last of their line for draco to no that he lose the best thing he had and that it will never come back plus it would be cool if his new love would kill for him and his kids beside its male/ male want more
person dominique1
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i re-read chapter 1 sirius is not there and neither is remus i don't know if sirius is and remus believed in harry i do hope so. and malfoys get what they want i so want harry to start hurting them with word something he to passive right now i know when my son got out of jail he wanted to beat anyone who told him what do
person dominique 1
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
last review from me until next update i re read everything and i figured out harry's parents were ass holes but there was no remus and sirius so there not dead i do hope that they have a small pocket of people that believe in harry i hope that harry is freed from albus so he can concentrate on his revenge i see no reason why harry needs to be at hogwart. and i notice the order was meeting in albus office so am just hoping that remus and sirius or hiding out and that harry can heal with them find his kids and a new love like a order inside a order i can't see sirius believing that harry did it he would have to hear from harry i just hope that sirius is hiding because he still wanted and that remus is with him or if he free he move to Bulgaria to be away from albus in the order. please update it like he free but not because he at hogwarts i do hope that harry goes to goblins and they can help beside the warden said he was in albus cusdoy only because they came and got him so he doesn't have to stay there and no harry sirius or remus godparents only and don't put tonks with remus i want them to pay i personal would get my thing and head to the bank and leave for a while
person cleo
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ok, now we know for sure there is some very strong drugs into Howgart's air, for it's impossible to have so many stupid peaple all together: 'studying for NEWT? becoming a teacher? ehi, mate welcome home????'... are they crazy or are they crazy???? For god's sake... he's just out of seven years in an hell of a prison, not a week-end in Vegas!!!
And Draco... 'since when I have been a mister?'... mmmm... let me think... maybe since when you called me a murderer, a traitor and kicked my ass in prison without a second thought, not to mention without trusting me enough to let me talk to you alone? But, ehi... he wants an opportunity to fix the problem! And exactly when did he gave Harry an opportunity to explain???
They all deserve nothing more than to be destroyed, to suffer (real suffering, like Harry's) and to realize they are lower than dirt!
Just a last thought: I know that arsehole of Harry's parents want him to destroy Voldemort... but it would be soooo wrong to let him burns this Wizarding World to the ground? Ok, he killed James and Lily, but seeing what awful parents they turned to be (even dead!) I don't think it was a great loss.
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh you TEASE us with Harry not coming out and beating the crap out of everyone! I know things take time, but man it's soooo good!!! Great work here, cannot wait until people, especially Malfoy!, learns what Harry has become!