rate_review Reviews

Another great chapter. I love how you're handling Hermione's rape, actually. A very serious subject and you're handling it very well. And I love that Mrs. Malfoy's in the story. I can't wait for another chapter!

Interesting I wouldlove to see where you take this...

This is a very serious topic and you are handling it with a lot of respect........ Keep them coming.

i like the plot... love to see where this will go..

Ok I like where this is going please update soon....

I will stick if you promised a good bashing of Ron mostly from Molly............. LOL

Omg I so cant w8 4 the next chapter. Plz write more soon!

This was a great first chapter! And don't let anyone push you around... there are so many stories with the same theme running through them here, it'll be hard to find one that no ones written about! LOL You just keep writing it, and we'll keep reading!

I like it so far. Not too sure I like the Harry being dead bit, but I can certainly deal with it. I hope you update soon!

I feel like someone should try and offer you some constructive criticism here, as you've obviously worked hard on the story. My primary piece of advice would be that you need to get a beta reader. The tenses are all wrong, you are writing in a way that comes across as awkward to the reader "Ron is drunk again. Ever since our best friend Harry died, Ron has been drinking..." this would read so much better if you had written "Ron was drunk again. Ever since Harry's death he had been drinking..."

I appreciate this is your first story on here, and this is why I offer the sincere recommendation that you go to a site where they offer Beta services and find someone you can work with to get this story worked on.