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for Intoxicate the Sun

by Lomonaaeren

person SParker
schedule April 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
about #19...

1. He rose fully to his feet
person kit
schedule April 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
huh, I should have known that Hermione would be prepared for ANYTHING. She's definitely the smartest witch of her time. The spell she used to resist the imperious seems like quite a headache inducer though. I definitely didn't expect the wheel to do that, not even something close to it. It sounded like a pretty amazing, but frightening sight. Draco's fascination with Harry's demonstration of power reminded me of when he was jealous of potter's quick connection to the hippogriff back in Hogwarts. Can't wait for the next chapter! I wanna see how the break-in to azkaban turns out. ^__^
person anonanon
schedule March 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Delicious :3
person SParker
schedule March 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
about #18...

1. Okay, either George IS crazy as a loon or his brother's
ghost stays with him.

2. Is there a picture of a 'Hebridean' somewhere?

3. I have to admit reading about Harry's powers is almost like
watching 'beauty in motion'. He is truly a cut above the rest
and I'm surprised Draco hasn't falling at his feet yet.
schedule March 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
About Ch 18:

I'm perfectly convinced now that dragons make a good story better. As if having more than one draco could ever make a story worse :P
person kit
schedule March 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic chapter update! very suspenseful. I'm wondering if the minister imperio'd hermione because she's a means to an end or because she had figured out that hermione was a spy? I'm excited to see what will happen next. Hermione is a pretty vital element to the rebellion since she was able to deliver messages btw harry and the other weasley's and she also had a lot of access to the ministry itself.
I enjoyed reading George's dialogue with himself. His comments always amuse me. I'm curious to see how the ministry raid will turn out......I want to see the 'wheel' in action! ^__^
well, until next chapter! <3
person SParker
schedule March 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
about #17...

1. I wasn't sure HOW the meeting was going to
turn out, I did feel nervous for Harry, BUT he
didn't do so bad...

2. Why do I get the feeling you just can't get
one over Hermione Granger, I mean who does
Clearwater think she is???
person purple-er
schedule March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
awesomeness. and george's inner dialogue and characterization is brilliant.
person kit
schedule March 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
a cute chapter ^w^
I liked reading the interaction between Ron and harry. It's always nice to see the companionship between close friends. I'm glad they discussed Harry's 'strange' behavior and that harry actually took the time to listen to Ron and acknowledge that he has to change in order for things to improve, like the rebels trust in his leadership. Their conversation took some weight off of harry's shoulders too. It seemed he was pretty stressed out about finding ways to overcome the ministry while not putting anyone, but himself, in danger. It must be a relief to know that people came into the rebellion, knowing the consequences, and that they are willing to deal with the sacrifices they may need to make.
Draco seems stressed. It seems he's not used to interacting closely with others, especially with how closely his interacting with Harry (saving him, teaching a malfoy family spell). I found it funny that when he just woke up, after an unrestful night, he thought of how "If someone saw him looking like this, they would either grow suspicious or mistake his confusion for weakness, and Draco would like to avoid either result." To me, Draco does seem a little confused...what with him fighting to get his parents out of azkaban, acting as a spy for the ministry, getting closer to Harry as a member of the rebels; it must be hard for him to keep a distance from everyone but still interacting with them to maintain appearances. I was excited to hear that they'll try to break in. Draco's reaction was fantastic! Does this mean that he will fully commit himself to Harry's side if he does get his parents or will he try and play it safe by maintaining contact with the ministry and the rebellion?
Draco seemed so vulnerable when Harry was expressing how much he cares for Dracos response and presence in the next rebel meeting. It must have felt unusual for him to receive so much consideration , specifically from someone who's attention he yearned for while at school. I thought it was cute to see him that way! :D He seems to preen but also be shocked when someone cares about his opinions and listens to what he thinks on a situation. No one must have cared for quite some time now, huh? probably since his parents were carted off to azkaban.
Another thing I found interesting was how Harry said his magic told him that Draco had been awake. I thought that was so strange. It made me wonder what else his magic could tell him. I would probably be paranoid, if I was Draco, since he is still technically spying for the ministry. Would Harry be able to find out? Maybe I am taking it to far since it's not like he could read Dracos mind and Draco does send his letters in a secure manner, but theres always a what if? I mean, no one really knows what Harry's magic is capable of .....except Harry himself. I'm so excited for the next chapter!!!
Thanks for the continuous updates.
schedule March 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
About Ch 16:

Go Ron! Way to let him have it! I'm still not convinced that Harry really gets it. He's going so fast into his plans when, if he's doing something that could be taken so badly by his followers, he hasn't reconnected with his fighters. Draco has wanted Harry to look at him with his eyes full of light before? Is this an old crush or his desire for friendship? I liked their hand interaction through the whole conversation. It's also funny that Harry just dragged Draco away while he was still trying to sort things through his brain. Somehow I don't think Draco with be too pleased that, not only is he going to be honoured in front of everyone, but that he's going to be honoured in front of everyone else with fuzz still on his teeth :P