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Not to be mean (it will probably come of that way), but does this story even have a plot? I originally liked the plot twists, as I felt they (somewhat) blended into the overall plot. However, now I think it's all plot pointed because you obviously didn't do a thorough outline of this story. If you had, the story would not be at chapter 51 and over 100k words without Hermione having made some progress with her powers or Tom finding away to control them. And on top of that, she has now been transported back 1940's, after the she finally gets the mark, which to some effect should have been the climax of this story, which would have lead to falling resolution and then the denuoement.

Not a single one of your fics is finished because you simply do not know how to plot out a story, which is why you don't know to end one. You just add extra elements that really don't add anything to the story or lost of unnecessary sex. This story reminded me of the Anita Blake series after chapter ten, all sex and little plot.

You are a talented writer, but you are only decent because of you can not pen down an exact plot and stick to it. I know this is harsh, but it's only because I think you could be a really good writer. The one thing that drives me insane with authors is when they drag the reader along without any clear destination and just had more twists and turns, which do not strengthen but weaken the plot.

Harry being a live and just as psychotic as Tom was very shocking. I liked dark Harry. I rant to know what happened to make him the way he is. I really wish there were other pov's other than Mione's.

I feel so bad for Hermione. A person can only take so much betrayal and loss.

I just wanted to tell you that I absolutely LOVE this story. I've been reading for three days straight! Thank you so much for sharing this with us. I hope you decide to post this story at other sites as well, like grangerenchanted.

I see you haven't updated in three monthes and hope that changes soon. You've got me hooked like everyone else in this story. I'm officially a Precious Mudblood follower.

Thank you again for all of your hard work.

Seargentlambchop

He's just evil isn't he, but i think he's not healing her because he's narcissitic and wants to punish her for some percieved insult to his vanity. I love this story, can't wait to see what's happening next.

only took three days to read....tired now :)
i love the intricacy of this story and the way Hermione's character is portrayed
cant wait to read more
much hugs
lizzie hopscotch

First I must say I love your story! On the other hand I am sad that everyday I check for an update (because your seem to be random) and there is no update for almost two months now... I know I am not the only one who reads this story and longs for the rest of the ride. I will say I have to keep reading your story over and over again to rememeber everything that is going on because of the long pauses between updates. If the lack of updates is because of the load of stories you are currently working on try wrapping some up or change to a new story each week. The more I read your story the more the forementioned grammer sticks out to me. I really hope the story gets updated soon and you find a balance in your life for this story. I know I will not be the only one who is saddend by the story ending here. (P.S. I know I more than likely misspelled something, for that I apologise. They don't have spellchecker and I am horrible at spelling.)

<3
Brittany

Okay, so let me just get this out: I was extremely iffy about a Hermione/Voldemort fic, especially when it started turning into Hermione/everyone. However, any iffyness I had quickly turned to awe at how wonderfully this was executed. Everyone's character was very believable, and the actual story-line is really gripping. I ended up liking Voldemort/Tom more than anyone, even if he is a bastard at times. My second favorite is definitely Draco- him being willing to live as a ferret for the rest of his life was really sad but wonderful. It seemed like, if anyone really loved her, it was Draco. Another thing to admit- when she got thrown back in time I literally just heaved a big exasperated sigh. Time-turning stories give me a headache. But, once again, you did it really well. It was interesting to see Tom as a young man, and I giggled when she licked the mark for the first time. I had a lot more to say, but I'll have to wait until the next chapter to get into it.
Basically, you're a fantastic author and I can't wait for more!

I am so hooked on this story! You did a great job let me know if you post any more on it. onecent1960@hotmail.com

Keep up the good work!

Love this story a lot!!! A LOT!!! I can't wait for the next chapter. I mean last chappie was interesting, but I wanna know how Grinderwald is actually going to treat after the whole novelty of finally getting his hands on her wears off. Seriously, we all know the other shoe is gonna, and has already, dropped but HOW does it drop. I want more Grinderwald/Hermione interaction damn it! And I miss Voldemort, sure Tom's nice, but Voldie is bettaaahhh! I hope you update soon!
It's actually embarrassing to say, but I stalk both this story and your profile every single day in the hopes for an update. XD This wait is unbearable. I love it!
Ok, am off to reread the entire thing again.