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So, I've only read the first two chapters so far, but they've been enough to get me to register just so I can provide feedback on this story.

It's great!

Okay, that's a little thin, but it really is. It does start off in a manner that gives a that could have caused the story to fall apart as just plain silly, but it then refuses to do that. I'm very much looking forward to how this story progresses.

I did feel that Ron's turn around was a little abrupt though. It might feel more natural if his epiphany came a little slower.

A couple of edit issues in Chapter two:


"That was NOT going to happe." - needs an 'n' for happen
Several Subject Bs don

inresting story, ron not neally as bad as you make him, but i like how you trying to change him.

Another great chapter, I'm looking forward to your next update.

Great start and an interesting twist--cant wait to read the next chapter--am available as a prof reader if you want one..

Good chapter,
What away to pick your future girl along with comparing them with thier mothers.It is good that Peter is captured and going to be punished for his crimes against the Potter family.Keep the good work awaiting next update.

Enjoying the story so far. Love Harry/Hermione fics. Just a bit of constructive criticism: watch your dates. It's 10-31-1981. Not 1991. That said can't wait for an update.

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Great start can't wait for the next chapte. I also like what you did with the prophecy; Dumbledork being hidden in the light and all.

I like this story very,looking forward to reading future chapters of this story.

thank you for sharing this fantastic chapter please update a.s.a.l.a. = as soon as life allows

Well I really like it so far so update soon.