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by grugster

schedule April 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh please, oh please, oh please...discribe in graphic details why Hermoine could not watch the next two; "because she was too distracted"!!!!

Also, let us know what happened with Draco, Neville and the others in the 'toy room'!!!

More, please!
person circe266
schedule April 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm. From previous chapters, we know that Hermione doesn't want to be treated like a whore . . . but what does she think that trading favors for sex is?? You know how much I LOVE your story, but I have to say that Roland is a jerk (at least he has been in every interaction we've seen so far), and Hermione being manipulated into a "deal" to have sex with someone she doesn't like or respect seems to be making her into exactly what she was afraid of becoming. I guess that I'll keep my fingers crossed that Roland will develop some redeeming qualities, and treat her like worthwhile human being, not just like a conquest.

Love the interaction between Tara and Hermione, and the sexy initiation.
person Ella
schedule April 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Pleaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase update soon *cries*.
schedule April 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Loved chapter 21 with everyone in the pool. Great for Hermione to have a little reunion with Toric AND get to meet Radgar finally! Great chapter, and as always, can't wait for more. :)
person Anon
schedule April 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love Radgar and Toric they are deffinately great members of Hermione's harem lol it was good to see Draco and Nevile back I missed them, and Calan too I am glad Draco has forgiven him. Great chapter I can't wait for the next one =)
schedule April 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Damn...that was SO hot!!!!! All of the subs (including Tara) being fucked in the pools. What an awesome chapter!!!

I was getting so hot from all the rutting going on in ONE pool. Radgar and Toric we so manipulative of Hermione. Can I trade places with her...PLEASE!!!

Don't keep us waiting too long for the chapter; please.
schedule April 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Solid, handsome, sweet and hot!!!!!!!!!! The perfect combination.
person Jessica
schedule April 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I loved it, it was sooooo goood. I love Neville and I just love Draco. Good chapter can't wait for the next one.
person circe266
schedule April 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yum! What a deliciously lemony chapter. All of the pairings were lovely, especially Hermione and her two dominants. (And it was nice to see Calan redeem himself.)

One thing that would be nice is if you could include more of what the dominants were thinking. Such as: had Radgar been thinking about Hermione since seeing her for the first time? Did he go to the pool with Toric in the hopes of hooking up with her? What does Toric think about the fact that he was raised 2 levels in status because of her? Was Roland watching from the other pool in envy?

And a side question: why does she almost always pass out after sex? Won't she ever get to enjoy cuddling in the afterglow? ;D

Thanks for another fun chapter.
schedule April 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
loved that last chapter! Wanting more fenrir! Missing him and his pack!!