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for As the clouds flew by, he wondered

by Tenshinhan

person Medic
schedule February 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Now I don't ever review story's but yours was so well writen. I much enjoyed it form start to end. I felt it needed a bit more, maybe to be a bit longer but I enjoy it nonetheless.
person Anon
schedule December 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Nice. One of the best stories I have read here. You have nice style of writing. Awesome!
schedule June 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really hope you continue to write more Ron/Ginny fan fiction as this was a very good story. I love the idea of Ginny having secret sexual feelings for Ron and then her deciding to seduce him.
schedule February 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I'm gonna take a guess and say something's wrong with the encoding for tis story
schedule December 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the tip, I applied it were I found it fitting. Though I do not understand the 3 star rating: Is it really that bad? I have seen worse with five stars. I think. Would appreciate more ratings though.
person horatius314
schedule November 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
a good start My recomendation would be to make the dialog more fluid. Use contractions. Will Not becomes Won't. Can not becomes Can't. If you decide to use longer forms for formality, Cannot will work. Other than that, good work.