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by JamesSMI

person Anon
schedule September 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Im sorry, but MOANING MYRTLE! MYRTLE! If you didn't know how to spell it, why bot google it instead of spelling it 10 different ways in one paragraph! ? I mean honestly, its just ruined what could have been an interesting story.
schedule March 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
you may wish to proof-read your spelling and it's Moaning Myrtle
schedule January 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
wow, your story sucks
schedule January 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is a pretty good first story :)

I'd like to see her let Ginny or Luna in on her secret
person jimeme89
schedule November 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Utterly fantastic and quite hot. Would love for you to continue and mix another girl in it.
schedule November 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great start, can't wait for more.
schedule November 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interesting set-up. I like the story, but you'll need some more work to really wow people. I'd start with spelling and grammar.

I'd also be careful with logic play. Some literary liscense is expected here of course, but if you use too much you should move the story to AU/AR. As it stands, Hermione cannot be Head Girl...she didn't attend her 7th year in Hogwarts, at least not in the canon.
schedule November 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this was so hot and I'm so wet right now. I definitely hope you'll be updating soon.