rate_review Reviews

Hey, not sure if I have reviewed before but here it is. I think your story is good. You have some nice ideas and themes( besides smut) but I get the feeling you are quit young in your writing style. You tend to introduce a problem or a plot device and then its gone again in the next chapter. Theres a misunderstanding but by the end of the chapter its all okay again. This is a bit annoying as its completly unrealistic. Another thing that could make this story more realistic is some actual human feelings or some inner turmoil. I get that the incesty part with Harrys mum and Hermiones mum was supposed to be " smutty incesty" but what would have made it even hotter/realistic would have been if they had acted a bit more normal, maybe hesitated a bit...tried to fight their pleasure and attraction...thought to themselves how wrong it was but how right it felt...something along those lines. It tends to make the story sort of shallow when the main character is just the type to think oh she looks like my dead mother, thats fun...lets shag her then --___--. Non of the characters ever seem to show any deeper feelings. even feelings of dislike only last until the problem has been neatly solved then everybody is happy happy happy again. Also why does Harry swear?? It makes him seem very immature. Swearing is usually a sign of not being in control :S That said your spelling is rather good and its nice to see a multi chaptered story ^_^

Also " Expect the unexpected" is a quote by Oscar Wilde XD

This story was going good had tons of smut and a actual plot. The last 10 or so chapters thought have been a disapointment. They got fast or too long winded in other words out of balance between plot and smut or just way to far fetched even for fanfiction and thats saying something. Hopefully you and your beta will stop trying to appease readers with supper fast updates and get back to quality updates because in the long run that is what counts. Hers looking forward to seeing if the next chapter update is back to the quality standards the first 25-30 chapters were.
Des

I must admit, this is a very interesting side of the story. I have never read a story anywhere remotely like this in all my time reading fanfics, and this is one of my favorites. I only started reading this fic a few days ago and I couldn't stop. I am already all caught up to date and can't wait for future chapters. I would love to see the witches pregnant, that would be a good twist. Thanks for a captivating read, and please, keep the chapters coming.

This is by far my favorite Potter read on this site. I am always checking to see if the next chapter is up. keep up the great writing.

Damn.... 12 women. I wonder when his demon will have enough, if it ever will.

I love this story. Thanks.

Miss Laila T

Heh, oh NICELY done Harry, Caley. Tips my hat to you both.

This is the best Harry Potter fan fiction I have ever read.

I have a few corrections for the beta

Hermione's lingerie set : http://ep. yimg. com/c a/I/teddygirl _2167_ 5559371

the Changs' lingerie set : http://ep. yimg .com/ca/ I/teddygirl _2167_104590148

I love this story, and really look foward to the new chapters. Sorry to hear about your troubles, I hope the end soon, so you can turn out some more Harry Harem Gold.