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Swimming huh. i say Herimonies mom :D
i now they both are goin to begone but u cud say hermiones dad had work emergcy and the was left behind.

Professor mongongal sud be warlock.

herimones bulies sud get a beating but in a fist fight with harry.

and ur right about me..lol

and yes the older ones sud get pregant
itll be easier on you too

also harry and hermiones mom can flirt and have wardrobe malfunctions

well as far as the idea about tonks poseing as malfoy to talk to fudge not a problem about fudge not being minister, since there were likely many fudge flunkies to blame everything on him and umbridge. which would mean tonk's could meet up with one of fudges high ranking flunkies who managed to keep thier jobs. i am sure there was a lot of bribes and blackmail done to get them to keep thier jobs. now when picking who ends up 'with child'. i think it would only be those who would not be needed on the battlefield. cissa and trixy would be needed so would likely not get preganent.


now as far as granger and bullies goes whatever happens can NOT be seen as being magical, it must seem to be something that could happen to any normal muggle. now say something such as a nightmare curse that forces the person to relive thier worst nightmares but only happens when they try to sleep. an of course this curse only works for a fortenight hence the reason it is not more widely used plus the fact it can be countered be almost and simple sleeping potion such as dreamless sleep. now of course the curse could last longer such as a month or 2 but that is up to you.


as for the next head of the wizumgot i think that would be something that the whole body votes on so whoever does the most bribery, blackmail and threats against family members would get the job. maybe someone such as parken or zambiney a high ranking bad guy unless harry counters them with debts owed to his family then puts in someone fair like bones.

now as far as the headmistress goes you have to remember wizards and witches age slower then muggles by half. so a 70 year old with would look more like she is 40 to 45 at the most. wizards and witches on average die at about 150 were as muggles die about age 75.so you figure once a witch or wizard hits adulthood thier aging then slows by half. so at 40 you look 30, at 50 you look 35, at 60 you look 40, at 70 you look 45 an at 100 you look 60.

for the smut u have to be more detailed on it. Thats one of the reasons it seems boring. Take ur time on your chapters, i feel like ur rushing. but great story keep it up. i think its time for the black sister to retire next year and stay at home. possible cuz their pregnant?? up to u. it wud slove the problem of so many women. the adults except for tonks being pregnant. and maybe have Luna and ginny thank him for their protection "oral" since they cant have sex uless u say he has the power not to bond with them. if so u can flings with other girls..
This is the longest review ive ever done lol
anyways keep it up :)

remember details :P
harry is a hero he deserves to have everthing

now i think harry would have very little to worry about from lord edgecombe trying to bankrupt him be wipeing out his businesses. the reason for this would be the black family money. the blacks are purebloods but have a home in the middle of a muggle area, why. the reason is simple all the land around that home belongs to the black family. you see the black family would have bought that land several hundred years ago and until about 100 years ago it was only used for farming until a very smart member of the black family chopped it up and started renting it to muggles. so that the muggles were now paying to fund the dark lords who are bent on wipeing them out. so most of the money in the black account now is just the profits from the muggles since the end of the war with voldimort. an the house is or was only ment as a vacation home so they could sit back and laugh at the stupid muggles working so hard to pay the rents that in fact are the money being used to wipe them out. now of course no member of house black that is in the know about this can give away that secret without dieing which is why no other purebloods have come up with this idea.

as for how tonk's can use her powers more i would think her making herself look like someone from the wizumgot such as malfoy sr. an then bribing fudge to vote the way she wants would be great. the fudge family may only have one vote but he likely has enough others he can blackmail and bribe to vote his way. an as a result that would likely tip the scale of the vote in his favor. an the type of vote you would want him to vote with you on would be a big one like having aurors from other countries brought in to help fight voldimort by renting 50 aurors from each of the other ministries from around the world so that the country gets 5,000 aurors in the field right away, instead of having to wait 3 years for them to be trained.an with all the money harry has i think he could cover the cost to rent hitwizards to join in the fight as well so that the country gets 10,000 new troops in the fight right away.

i think getting a dark arts detector to be able to detect the dark mark would greatly cut down on the number of death eaters out there. just have a few hitwizards with the detectors roaming around the ministry plus some in hogsmeade and daigon alley an within a week you will have a good chunk of tom's marked death eaters all locked up. an no i did not say anything about them being locked up in the ministry so they could bribe thier way out. house potter has a blood fued with the gaunt family and it's allies so thereby he can take prisoners of war in that fued.

now since malfoy sr. is now a wanted man they would need to meet someplace other then his office an when fudge wants to know why malfoy would want him to rent aurors from other countries that is simple, fudge has to be seen as doing something to help in the war to keep his job but ironing out the finer points such as how much they get payed and how long they stay could take monthes if not longer. so thereby fudge seems to be doing something but in fact is not because it is not fudges fault the other ministries are trying to rob him blind or at least that is what he will tell the papers every time they ask.

Hey. I love your story so far. It's rare to find a decent story with smut and plot. It's amazing. As for the smut, I honestly don't believe there is enough. I feel the scenes should be longer as well.