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January 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Sooooo good! You're quickly becoming one of my favorites! I'm going down your list of stories and I'm loving them all! :D
~E.A.~
~E.A.~
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January 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh this story is most enjoyable! please update soon!
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January 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
OMG i love love love this story!! soooo HOT! i can't wait for more~ This is such a well written story and i like that it doesn't make severus out to be some lovey dovey goofball once he has bedded hermione. More please!!
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January 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I wanted to send you a message about this, but I did not have access to that feature, so here goes in comments.
You have asked for input about your story and as you were doing so well I never felt the need to comment other than to say "Good Job". But as you have stated having trouble driving the story at this sensitive area, I thought I would contribute.
While you are correct that they can't go on having sex for the rest of the chapters without the story becoming wildly unrealistic, it is still necessary for them to have emotionally driven interaction at this early stage in their relationship. I think a good place to go next ( now that we know Snape was fully aware during his coma) would be to expose some of his feelings for her outside of sex. Certainly, he has sexual attraction to her, and has indulged in sexual fantasies involving her while comatose and also awake, but Hermione expressed many other feelings and indeed a deeper tenderness beyond sexual attraction while caring for him. This deeper emotional connection may indeed drive him to want to care for and protect her as she did him. Perhaps the trip to the shower involves a more caring, even cleansing, and tender activity than previous scenes have shown. (also given his weakened state, I doubt his body would cooperate with anything more vigorous)
Summarily, now that he has made his point that sex requires two bodies as well as two minds, albeit vastly different from one another, and the act cannot be fully experienced without the desired partner sharing your passion, that it does not necessarily mean their hearts are so very far from the same place. After all, while he heard all of her fantasies, he also heard her confess a deep fear of losing him and the joy of simply be in his presence.
You have asked for input about your story and as you were doing so well I never felt the need to comment other than to say "Good Job". But as you have stated having trouble driving the story at this sensitive area, I thought I would contribute.
While you are correct that they can't go on having sex for the rest of the chapters without the story becoming wildly unrealistic, it is still necessary for them to have emotionally driven interaction at this early stage in their relationship. I think a good place to go next ( now that we know Snape was fully aware during his coma) would be to expose some of his feelings for her outside of sex. Certainly, he has sexual attraction to her, and has indulged in sexual fantasies involving her while comatose and also awake, but Hermione expressed many other feelings and indeed a deeper tenderness beyond sexual attraction while caring for him. This deeper emotional connection may indeed drive him to want to care for and protect her as she did him. Perhaps the trip to the shower involves a more caring, even cleansing, and tender activity than previous scenes have shown. (also given his weakened state, I doubt his body would cooperate with anything more vigorous)
Summarily, now that he has made his point that sex requires two bodies as well as two minds, albeit vastly different from one another, and the act cannot be fully experienced without the desired partner sharing your passion, that it does not necessarily mean their hearts are so very far from the same place. After all, while he heard all of her fantasies, he also heard her confess a deep fear of losing him and the joy of simply be in his presence.
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January 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, my! I do believe I'm going to be waiting anxiously for the next cha[ter, that's for certain. I worried at first, when it seemed Snape was disgusted by her. I mean, it's not that one could expect him to be happy about being fondled in his sleep without some mixed emotions. I just didn't expect someone like Hermione to have actually gone through with chosing a favor. But it shows her as more human. And I actually like the real Snape as opposed to fantasy Snape, with his warm hands and succulant mouth. My favorite quote is when he says he shags just like any other man. It reminds me of a book I once read about a man who was idolized by a woman. She was trady to commit adultery with this man. She had an entire life planned in her head. And she didn't hardly know him at all.
I think I can't wait to see Hermione get to know the real Snape. The one who, like every man, can be annoying or slightly sweet, or absolutely asinine. Can't wait!
Sincerely.
I think I can't wait to see Hermione get to know the real Snape. The one who, like every man, can be annoying or slightly sweet, or absolutely asinine. Can't wait!
Sincerely.
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
AWESOME... update aand is HOT one. Super yummy!
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really love this 'book'!! And now to find that 1) he has fantasies of his own, and 2) that he could hear and feel everything during his coma...is just priceless.
I look forward to your next chapter.
I look forward to your next chapter.
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I KNEW IT! Of course he heard and felt everything, how could he have not and still managed to react physically, even though he couldn't move? XD Now that he can he obviously is going to milk this desire she has, and the one she's inspired in him, for all that its worth! I just hope they can learn to love as well as lust for eachother. Bring on more!!
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
OMG. I love it.
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yay! I am so happy he finally let down his walls and allowed her to see his desire, too. I know he had to make her see him as a real person first, before he could relax, but the feeling of joy I had when he admitted to his own fantasies...perfect. I look forward to her relaxing enough to fully understand him and then enjoy their new place in each other's lives. :-) Thank you! HG4eva