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OMG! I LOVE this story!! Please update sooon! =)

I know I haven't written any reviews, but I was so caught up in the story. I love this story BTW. It's now one of my favorites =) LOVED the sexy scene!

I love this poor girl! I hope to see more soon.

that wazz not the real Draco i hope she can tell the differents when he comes bakk update soon!!!

You're welcome. :) As I said, I'm learning too. :)

Now I had to read that twice because I was thinking 'holy crap, what's going on?' I though Blaise had turned around and done the right thing in apologising but no. Then I had a little thought about what your story's twist might be and I have a theory on exactly what happened. Now I have to wait and see if I guessed right. :) I liked that Harry was more or less accepting of her 'friendship' with Draco but damned if I would let Ron hold my hand after what I witnessed. Hermione's a better actress than I am. LOL

I'm glad Blaise apologised even though I'm not sure if he was forced to do it or he decided to do it on his own. Wondering why all the sudden interest in Hermione too, (what's the twist? LOL) well except for Ron. These boys that think with the wrong head. LOL I can imagine the indescretion might almost be forgiveable if he hadn't called her a mudblood as well. AlLo intrigued as to who that other boy may have been - Damon perhaps? LOL And what's with those two necklaces, even more interesting. :)

I'd agree with your thinking that a full on sex scene there would have been a little early though there was nothing wrong with them pleasuring each other and seeking a certain level of comfort. However, I feel that telling each other they loved one another may have been a little rushed. It is your story though, and if it felt right to put it in there, then that is what matters. I'm far from an expert on writing either, but I appreciate advice that helps me to improve, so I hope you understand that I am offering an opinion, which you are entitled to ignore if you choose to do so, in hopes that you feel more comfortable with what you post.

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this is extremely funny because i just finished reading your wonderful story and went to check my reviews to find that you had reviewed. your story is wonderful as i said before. i can not wait till you update. your story is bookmarked so that i can always find it to check for updates. i will post my story on fanfiction.net i think and look for a beta over there too. i have an add up on the forum here but no one has responded. you like the pairing that i do so i hope to see you post more stories!

Please post more soon! really good plot so far! i want to see what happens next. will hermione eventually forgive ron? if not whose side does harry end up taking? so many questions left hanging.

If you go into the INFO & SUPPORT section, then into the F.A.Q. tab and go into the archived section of that tab, there was a heading there along the lines of "Allowed HTML tags for formatting your stories and texts" and that gives you the guidelines of how to set out your page. For example, to get italics, at the beginning of the paragraph you do this < i > and to finish it, you do this < /i > Bold is < b > and < /b > to close. (Take out the spaces) Please forgive me, when I suggested italics, I should have asked if you knew how to do that instead of just assuming that you knew. :( Anyway, on to the review. :)

Thanks for spacing it out, much easier to follow (for silly old me anyway) LOL Aww I don't like when Blaise is the bad guy, but I have to suck it up for the sake of the story. :) And he definitely was the bad guy but I have to say, I hate Pansy even more right now. As a woman, you'd think she'd understand what Blaise had in mind and react accordingly, blood should have nothing to do with it in a case like that. Whatever happened to women sticking together in this situation? Yep, definitely more pissed off with her. Of course, I'm all for Draco taking out his disgust on Blaise, too. Poor Hermione, if she wasn't confused before, she'll be totally beside herself now, trying to work out what the hell is going on with Draco and why he might have saved her. Also think the kiss with Ron was the perfect after effect of what just happened. Of course, she would turn to someone she was familiar with to seek some comfort, and Ron, as naive as ever, took it to mean something more and then acted like a right bloody git when what she really needed was just to feel safe. Well done! :)

Good start! Your ideas are great; just keep working on your writing style and grammar!