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September 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
What a great twist - how interesting that both Hermione and Draco are out for Johnathon, only one has been sent to kill and the other to bring him in peacefully (not sure how peacefully). LOL I was sure Hermione had recognised Draco under the guise of his "Black Knight" outfit too, but you tricked me there as well. Very intriguing. Can't wait for more. :)
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September 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Very intriguing opener!
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September 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Loving it already. This has the potential to be great. :) Can't wait for the next chapter.
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Two chapters beta'd - well come on, where's the other one? Loved it, can't wait for more. :)
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is a very good start. Very well written.
Keep it up!
Straight
Keep it up!
Straight
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interesting! Can't wait to see what happens next!
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh what a great start to a great story!!!! Love it very much and I can't wait to read what happens next!!!
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i loved it! very good indeed, i cant wait too read more...
your a really good writer, i am not so good at garmmer and that sort of thing..but i have a beta :)
so its all good..i did have my fanfic on fanfiction.net but they took it down for its explict content..lol
i was up too 12 chapters on the site too, well now im rewriting it on here and already got chapter 1 up :) i just hope i did a good job
your a really good writer, i am not so good at garmmer and that sort of thing..but i have a beta :)
so its all good..i did have my fanfic on fanfiction.net but they took it down for its explict content..lol
i was up too 12 chapters on the site too, well now im rewriting it on here and already got chapter 1 up :) i just hope i did a good job
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i love a good chase. mostly a car chase but i like these chase if they have promise. and this chase does. who will win? and will hermione find out the truth about and her client?
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September 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
All right... "Jonathans leaving" should be "Jonathan's leaving", and you have a major problem with comma placement ("Herbert, another man in her party wouldn