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by kstargal

person Panther Eyes
schedule September 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
wow! a load of danger with a bit of hot foreplay (really hot). so johnny boy knew who they were and knows more than they do. you offically have me at the edge of my seat. please update soon.
person anon
schedule September 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying this! You have a great plot, a very good grasp of the characters (they're not horribly OOC) and no glaring grammar errors. Thank you for sharing what promises to be a fabulous story. I'm looking forward not only to more chapters, but to giving your story a second reading once it's finished.
schedule September 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh my what a great chapter!!! I wonder who or what gave Jonathon his information? It's all very interesting and I can't wait for another update!!!
schedule September 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
that was sexy and very imaginative. but how did Jonathon get to them so quickly? was he watching them? poor Hermione
schedule September 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I really like where this story is going.... its very interesting.

Straight
schedule September 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, exciting! In more ways than one! :)
schedule September 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is fun :) Looking forward to the rest!
schedule September 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, they are working against each other....OH MY! And her little secret desires...how delish. I'm sure Draco would be more than up to the task.
person Panther Eyes
schedule September 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
HOLD IT! hermione is a member of CMOA too! wait if both hermione and draco are members of CMOA and both have missions that involve that johnathan guy why is hermione is only suppose to capture and draco is to kill. what is CMOA plans for this supposed "criminal"? i only know that if hermione and draco don't shag before getting this guy it will really put clitch in the shagging.
person witchinghour185
schedule September 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
that was great !!! i can't wait for what's next, please keep writing, it was so intriguing, intense, and well done. standing ovation !