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by Pheobi

schedule August 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i like but i kinda feel bad because its a joke
schedule August 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
that was brill the way you turn harry into looking at sev really looking at the man
schedule August 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
okay but who put the spell on harry
schedule August 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
ginny knows how to deep thoat not good it tell'ss me slut but hay as long as she not with harry its cool
schedule August 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
okay all re read chapter 37 to see but as it stand i really don't like albus that much for being blind anyway i hope that harry and sev have a good start when sev finds out about the baby and i can picture draco soft and loving because the choice his father made and as far as draco mom cissa i believe it all a act to protect her family that why i like her
schedule August 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This story is absolutely brilliant! I love it so much! Please update soon!
schedule August 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey, great story so far. I love how in-character you keep everyone and how realistic it all feels, it's fresh and interesting throughout, and you seem to really get inside the characters' heads. That said the chapters are a tad too short, (just finished six) it's like 'bam bam bam - next chapter!' and there isn't time to digest what's happened, which is a shame as this story has a lot of potential and I think you could be one of the better fanfic authors on the site :) I just think maybe a little more forward-planning, description and length - everything else such as plot, characters and imagery you have perfect :)
person wynja
schedule August 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi! Sorry for being an idiot! When i opened the story today, I saw the first A/N, and there the explanation was.... felt so stupid... sorry again. YOu don't deserve stupid readers like me... but I'm going to stick around anyway... ;)Oh, there's a lot of chapters to read today... aaarrggh, and I'm half falling asleep, I'm so tired... but I can't sleep with more to read...
person arya
schedule August 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I've read the story before but it was never finished. However I hope that you truly finish this story this time, because i just love the plot. Especially the interaction between snape and harry, with snape not giving in too easily. However in the future I hope that harry doesn't get together with anyone else, or something. I want him to be a virgin for snape ;) since severus deserves the best :)
person wynja
schedule August 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
-lol- love it! So funny! Please update soon!