rate_review Reviews

I really like this story but please don't make Harry weak, pathetic, stupid, or blind. I'm surprise he is not mad or shuting off his emotions or something reckless. I would be furious with everyone just telling me what they want me to know. Everyone has lied and kept things from him and those he is now trusting are doing the same.

I can't wait for Harry to whop some ass...I really like how he finally wakes up to the fact not all is what it appears and I can't wait for him to see Tom

You've got a great story in progress here but you really need to double check things before putting it online.

You use 'trader' (a person who trades things) instead of 'traitor.'

I would recommend a beta to look over each chapter and correct errors before publishing this online. :) Great job otherwise.

Hi, while I do enjoy the story it is a bit annoying with the misspelling. I'll still read and look after any updates but it does take away some of the magic of the plot when you can't really focus on what you are reading. And I'm not saying or well writing this to be mean. If it takes an extra day or so to update just to reread it and really make sure there are as few misspelling as possible then do it. The ones that really enjoy the story and want to read more wont mind and if they do then fuck them. Plus most of the misspelling are easy mistakes like; re sort (which should be one word) and trader (which I do think you mean traitor). There are many good sites on the net which you can use to correct the words you are unsure about or just check them in a dictionary. Now I hope you take this review as a good one and not as a flamer. :) I just want to help you improve your writing and there by improve the story itself.

Best of luck,
Anne