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i love the story and can not wait for you to update the next chapter of the story i cry at some chapter and laught at of chapters that you have up right now. what will harrydo now that he here droce and sal talking about his mates. can not wiat for more of the story. it is so good.

Yay now Harry knows!

Hi there,

I'm new here, but when I read this story, I wanted to comment on your note at the top of the page. I applaud you for having the courage to express your feelings in such a constructive (and beautifully written) way. I too have been there in my lifetime and the people who say rude things to you about such a sensitive subject can go suck an egg. Personally, I think the three of you; (I believe this is co-written by TheDarkLadyVoldemort666, Shay92 and God of Mercy), are doing a brilliant job. Keep up the good work!

Leafy_Sea_Dragon

I have been enjoying this story so far but there is only one thing that I have an issue with. Spelling and Grammar; you have things spelt incorrectly (and I'm talking universally incorrect not the difference between countries because I am use to that now). I am talking about things like "Now Marvolo, your going to ware a hole in the floor..." from Chapter 8 which should, in fact, be written "Now Marvolo, you are going to wear a hole in the floor..." and also an instance in an earlier chapter where you say "blood trader" instead of "blood traitor". A trader is a person who trades things, a traitor is someone who betrays their country, a person, family, etc. There are also instances where you switch from past to present tense (though it has only happened a couple of times) which ruins the flow of the story. You have a good thing going as far as the story goes so I suggest sorting out those few things to make it even better. Perhaps ensure that you have a beta to read over everything and make sure that they are good with spelling and grammar and so forth as well, or they're not much of a help.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I HOPE THEY TELL HIM SOON!!!!!!!

LOVE IT!

I love this story.Keep it up:)

I absolutely love this story so far you have done a great job.. I feel so sorry for Harry though.. I hope he figures it out soon.

Ok read it through. I love the story. Can't wait for more

(What will people think about their hero becoming a trader?) ...that last word should be TRAITOR
Curious to see what happens next between the 3 mates. Are they going to tell him before he graduates?

This story is so brilliant and I can't wait for more. I really like how Harry is with his eyes wide open.