rate_review Reviews

Another great chapter. Ah! Lucius is behind it all. I don't know why I was expecting someone else more unexpected. Poor Sev being tortured again. Not sure if I buy his attitude towards Teddy; I think after being healed over and over again he would stop referring to him as boy and brat. It's ok to show Severus' softer caring side as we saw glimpses of it in his interactions with Diedre. One picky detail- the silver would owned by the Shacklebolt family not the Kingsly family as Kingsly is the character's given name.

Ch 38. These were the scenes meant to add humor? Yes, levity can be added to an angsty story if it flows naturally; unfortunately the first two scenes were not funny. Perhaps the first scene with Millie in Egypt has some relation to the plot but the BJ for boots did not come across as humorous ( not just the idea of prostitution, but the writing itself was not funny) nor did the scene with Minerva. It just seemed thrown in. This chapter had one incorrect you're instead of your whinging), professor's when it should have been plural professors, and Gringotts without the apostrophe.

Chapt 43: ... at least he got some sort of karma backlash right? Thanks for all the warnings in the chapters, since I found the fic at 68 chapters and have not been reading the individual chapter summaries as they post, it helps to brace a little.

Though the fic is dark, it is sometimes quite funny, like the Millicent bit with her friend in Egypt. Also this line was also amusing, though you probably didn't intend it to be. "Being the extreme sexual deviant, I find their obnoxious disdain weak" I think it takes a good writer to pull that sort of thing off.

Good fic overall, I hope it ends happily, if only for Snape. He's the only male besides Harry who hasn't molested a woman... though I suppose he did threaten to force Ava to give him oral.

Wow that Miss Donnely's dialogue must have been hell to write. I had fun reading her lines aloud ...as that was the only way I could read them at all. :)
The fic has started out very well, and since there are 64 more chapters to go, I'll be sure to keep reading. Just wanted to write a positive review before continuing.

Chapter 8: Fic is getting interesting though I'm surprised you've written lemons for next chapter... the build up thus far doesn't scream sexual tension between anyone other than Brian and the nurses or Deride/Severus. More of a mutual respect. We'll see though eh?

This fic is alot darker than I thought it would be. Nevertheless, it is very enjoyable.

This part really hit me.
"Hermione nearly screamed when the door opened again, and someone jumped over the bed, grabbing her arm. It was Severus.

Oh wow, took me a while to read all of this, but I finally finished to cathch up and damn it's a good story! Loved it!

OMG!!!! Ive loved this story!!!! I hope you are still updating it because I really want to know what happens!

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Oh, finally! I'm so glad for Severus.

OTOH I hope now that he gained his magic back, he'll stop being so awfully passive and start making his own decisions instead of letting himself bossed around and manoevered about by condenscending!Minerva.