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Oh holy moly!!!! Who is their back up?

The story thus far...#19.

First of all, I'd like to thank you for chap. 17...and the prayer you put there, it
really gave me inspiration to pray more thoroughly in my life, whenever I feel a
little dip in my 'faith well'. :-)

Also, I must commend you, it's not everyday someone has 'the balls' to tackle religion
& magic in a story, I know for a fact these type of stories are few and far between, I
think most people are scared of other folks opinions.

All in all, despite a rocky six chapter start, you've truly come a long way..keep up
the good work.

Interesting tale, though I'm sad to say riddled with problems. One the entire ministry attack was written in a confusing manner, there were simply too many breaks and not enough transition. Plus the characters suddenly knew more than they had the chapters before, such as Draco's love for Harry. You also hinted strongly to Draco being abused by Lucius, something that was only mentioned in passing before and now seems to be told to us as something the reader already knows. Two, all throughout the chapters are instances of typos and wrong words, such as we instead of he, or bead instead of bed. If it was only a few times it would be ignorable however it occurs constantly through the course of the chapter and every chapter at that. Definitely continue its a good idea and story, however take your time. Develops your ideas and the characters before you change scenes and point of views. Don't worry about cramming so many character's views into the chapter, more time and development with one person is better than scrambled tid bits from a hoard of people. On another note I hope you update soon and I look forward to the next chapter.

~Fullmoon

I really love this story! I have gotten so into it that I keep forgetting to review LOL I am sorry about that. Keep up the good work (:

Very, VERY interesting! This story just keeps getting better and better :D

Things are lookin bad for Pans.
so, they stopped 'voldimort' temporarily. How do they stoop him perminantly?
Need more spaces or something else to indicate where a new chunk or scene is starting otherwise they all run together.
even something as simple as
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is effective.

Very cool Ilove this story so far I wouldlove to see more when you can thank you....

wow, this story really moves. I like that. ^^

So, just sat down and read all of this at once, and I gotta say I really enjoyed it. The concept is well thought out, and the religious twist works into the story line in a really interesting way. Some mistakes with the names and places could be fixed - Blaise Zabini, Voldemort, Grimmauld place- but on the whole, I really love what you have, and I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for more!

Soooo need chapter 10!!!!