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August 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
just spent all morninv reading all the chaps. I just started reading this story, and am already addicted to it...
keep up the good work, and i am anxiously awaiting chaps 16-infinity :)))
keep up the good work, and i am anxiously awaiting chaps 16-infinity :)))
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August 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
...again any special power that Harry would possess? BTW, any predator that Harry should be afraid of?
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August 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness. Draco is so sweet and Hermione is such a bitch. I have personlly never liked her carecter I find her annoying so good job. Now who is dear sweet Ron going to be with? He's one of my favs. Any way love the story can't wait to read more, update soon.
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I liked it:)
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August 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Love this story so far. Can't wait to read more. if you send update emails can you add me to the list. wingnut19741@gmail.com
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August 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sooooo need chapter 14!!! I'm hooked!
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August 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey Fallen, another great chapter. I love Luna! That line was perfect so funny. :) Well untill next time. ~Bliss
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August 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
love this story so much!! I cant wait for the next chapeter!
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August 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
interesting story - a bit different and that is very hard to find... please add me to your alert notifications. Keep up the good work!
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July 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interesting; I'll be looking forward to another chapter! I like creature fics like this and yours seems to have a unique twist to it. I really like how you worked the whole "finding-out-what-creature-he-is-through-process-of-elimination" scene; it had a more believable quality than other stories that just go, "Boom, your a ___ Harry!"
There are some inconsistencies that I wish to point out, simply as constructive criticism. First, Hermione is obviously against Harry and Draco's relationship, I get that part, but in an earlier chapter (not sure which one, but I know it was the one where Harry sat in Draco's lap during Potions class) you wrote something along the lines of Hermione hugging them both and eager to be a part of their "wedding." My advice, write out all of your characters and their stance in the piece you are writing BEFORE writing the story itself. It makes things so much easier, plus I know when I write, I sometimes get caught up in one scene, then completely forget about that important scene when I get caught up in another. It's just a lot easier to reference a little footnote, "(Hermione = Bad)," than to go back and rewrite a chunk of your story.
Another thing, please slow down when writing relationships. Take a breath, relax, then try to visualize this, "The mean bitch/bastard from high school that has humiliated and insulted you and your peeps for over half a decade, has suddenly invited you to their birthday party." Would you go? Would you honestly take the time to dress up presentably, then go out and purchase a gift with your own money (because showing up without a gift is just plain uncouth, not to mention, terribly awkward when gift opening time comes), for some stuck-up little snot whom you can't stand? No, you wouldn't! You'd sooner gate crash with aforementioned scorned friends and tear that place up than put on a gracious face and celebrate said scumbag's birth! My point is, when writing Harry/Draco stories especially, you must ease into it. I do appreciate the element of attraction in a fic, but even Lady Lust cannot wave her magic riding crop and "poof", everything be peachy keen.
I feel like I'm coming off bitchy, but I'm honestly not trying to. It just really threw me for a loop when I read the first few chapters and I was like, "Yay! A great beginning, some intrigue, suspense is building for Draco's appearance, a little in-depth knowledge of creature-status." Then, " H: -sniff,sniff- Mmm, you smell yummy. D: Really? Thanks! Hey, wanna get hitched, since you're kinda attached at the hip there? H: Sure! That way I get to smell you all day! H + D: Yay! Love!" If you can imagine, my eyes were spinning going "what the hell just happened?"
I won't speak for other readers, but I like quite a bit of angst in stories, maybe a little pinch of heartbreak on the side. Anyway, I like where you're going with this so far, especially since I'm getting the vibe that Harry is gonna be the bottom (call me crazy, but I can't read anything without Harry as a sub, lol). Please don't be angry with me, I really wasn't trying to come off sounding Hermione-ish!
My best wishes,
Nour
There are some inconsistencies that I wish to point out, simply as constructive criticism. First, Hermione is obviously against Harry and Draco's relationship, I get that part, but in an earlier chapter (not sure which one, but I know it was the one where Harry sat in Draco's lap during Potions class) you wrote something along the lines of Hermione hugging them both and eager to be a part of their "wedding." My advice, write out all of your characters and their stance in the piece you are writing BEFORE writing the story itself. It makes things so much easier, plus I know when I write, I sometimes get caught up in one scene, then completely forget about that important scene when I get caught up in another. It's just a lot easier to reference a little footnote, "(Hermione = Bad)," than to go back and rewrite a chunk of your story.
Another thing, please slow down when writing relationships. Take a breath, relax, then try to visualize this, "The mean bitch/bastard from high school that has humiliated and insulted you and your peeps for over half a decade, has suddenly invited you to their birthday party." Would you go? Would you honestly take the time to dress up presentably, then go out and purchase a gift with your own money (because showing up without a gift is just plain uncouth, not to mention, terribly awkward when gift opening time comes), for some stuck-up little snot whom you can't stand? No, you wouldn't! You'd sooner gate crash with aforementioned scorned friends and tear that place up than put on a gracious face and celebrate said scumbag's birth! My point is, when writing Harry/Draco stories especially, you must ease into it. I do appreciate the element of attraction in a fic, but even Lady Lust cannot wave her magic riding crop and "poof", everything be peachy keen.
I feel like I'm coming off bitchy, but I'm honestly not trying to. It just really threw me for a loop when I read the first few chapters and I was like, "Yay! A great beginning, some intrigue, suspense is building for Draco's appearance, a little in-depth knowledge of creature-status." Then, " H: -sniff,sniff- Mmm, you smell yummy. D: Really? Thanks! Hey, wanna get hitched, since you're kinda attached at the hip there? H: Sure! That way I get to smell you all day! H + D: Yay! Love!" If you can imagine, my eyes were spinning going "what the hell just happened?"
I won't speak for other readers, but I like quite a bit of angst in stories, maybe a little pinch of heartbreak on the side. Anyway, I like where you're going with this so far, especially since I'm getting the vibe that Harry is gonna be the bottom (call me crazy, but I can't read anything without Harry as a sub, lol). Please don't be angry with me, I really wasn't trying to come off sounding Hermione-ish!
My best wishes,
Nour