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Outch.. poor fleur :)
Continue, it's a great chapter!
Z.

i have to disagree ron was in just as much danger as harry becouse he was with harry for every thing, he risk his life to save harry.

as for ron getting mad at harry for dating his sister that is normal, and would be expected. plus harry did not tell him i would be angry and hurt

you could very easly have hermoine with harry and with ron would not be very hard, i like ron becouse he is the only one that stand up to harry, and with harry new power he need some one to stand up to him or he will be worse then valdormore

I disagree with the fact that Hermione wouldnt be equil to Harry as Ginny is. She might not be quite as strong as Ginny but she would be able to out think her. Infact now that I think about it if she dose transform it would be in the form of a sphinx (She already kinda has Cat Genes in her from the Polyjuice Incedent) and if Hermione is an Author Avatar for JKR after she transforms she would probably find the punishments of Pansy and the three stooges fitting

I'd vote for keeping only one girl as Harry's primary. Otherwise the mechanics all get too complicated.

Perhaps Hermione could become something like his vicerine? She'd enjoy the power, I think.

Thank you for the information.......... This is going to be so much fun...............

I'm hoping that you will add Hermione to the harem. you already stated that the bonds have some benefits, with her being Harry's friend i thing he would want to help protect Hermione any way he could and i don't see the reason why harry can't bond Hermione and then let her live her live normally (with some sex on the side). if you don't think that Hermione would agree then you could make it necessary( like Hermione being hurt and Harry trying to help her).

if you don't want to go that way then you could spin it other ways. i would think if Hermione knew about the bonds she would like to to at-least research it, you could spin it any number if ways from there.

the point i was trying to make was that there are number of ways to get Hermione into the harem without making it OOC( and i don't think thats the problem, you already made harry and Ginny pretty OOC). i don't see any reason not to add Hermione expect your own wishes as an author and maybe readers wishes.

it pretty much become "why Hermione should be in harem" post so something about the story: the story isn't my thing ( i don't think you should ever mix smut with plot, but its just my opinion), but its still good enough to get me to read it. there is a flow (witch is missing in most fanfics), i didn't notice any glaring grammar errors and plot isn't any worse then other "smut with plot" fanfics, it actually may be better then most( admittedly i didn't read many of them so i can't really judge well).

i have a problem with then you started this fics time-line vise. i don't think theres anything for harry to do but prepare for tri-wizard tasks( or waterer its called) for now. I'm afraid that you will try to fill up time with lots of smut witch will get repetitive, and then boring fast( the trap that most "smut with plot" stories falls into), or have harry do nothing for long periods of time without any reason other then author don't having anything to write about ( another option that i see often, and often seen in fics without smut too).

i think this review is getting a bit long so i will leave it with good fic so far, and hoping it won't go downhill from there but it will continue to soar.

PS. i just realized that with harry and Ginny turning heads by merely being in others presents makes it ever easier to get Hermione in.

well its a fantastic start so far i hop you have harry bond Hermione with a bound of equals or close to that thank you for sharing

Are you planning to include Hermione on this fic? Or any danger or rescue?

why did you have to make ron a jerk, in cannon he almost died for his friends a few times, to me that make up for a a kid of 14 say a few bad things.

Awesome!
Continue,
Z.