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for Past Sins

by Magzie

person Anon
schedule December 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is a very good story. I pray you continue it! I love the romantic atmosphere of Italy and the fact that Draco and Hermione happen to be staying in the same hotel. Continue this!!
person kellar
schedule August 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i will beta for you if you like im not brittish im canadian but i have a friend who is brittish so i can get the slang and im good with grammar and spelling for the most part email me if you are interested keepsake101@hotmail.com
schedule August 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is really sweet. I'm enjoying it. Also, I didn't see any glaring mistakes or typos that would detract from the story, so don't worry about getting a beta. You're doing a great job on your own. The only thing that I would encourage you to do that would make the story even more interesting, would be adding more detail and/or information within the character's thoughts and emotions. Just fill it out a bit more ^_^
schedule August 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
interesting story, hope for an update soon!
schedule June 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
as well written as that was, there's just one detail I have to correct:

Madame Pomfrey was not a professor, she was just the school nurse
schedule May 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am really enjoying the story so far, and do hope that it ends up a Draco/Hermione story not a Blaise/Hermione story! Also interesting that you had her have a thing for Dean and that Ron and Lavender were longtime boyfriend/girlfriend. Anyways, good so far, and can't wait for updates so I can see what happens at the Ball. Perhaps a little Draco/Hermione interaction please! :-) So in short, very much looking forward to an update and I'm really liking your story so far!

-A Mere Reader
schedule April 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Draco is so cute when he apologizes, well....... let's see.......... scenary love it, out of London for a change is very good, Blaise as a friend, and possibly more..........yes!!!! Just wishful thinking I love the triad between Draco/Hermione/Blaise. But you got my attention now. So go back to your computer we need the following chapter or better yet chapters.......so run along you got work to do.........
schedule April 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
An interesting and intriguing beginning. I look forward to more very soon. Thank you, HG4eva
schedule April 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Thumps up up up up... LOL