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I got about halfway through this chapter before Realising why I was having a bit of trouble reading it. You haven't used any commas. None at all. You need to use them to break down the longer sentences into phrases. And also at the end of speeches. Another nitpick; the word is ridicolous, not Redicolous.

There's nothing wrong with the story itself but the grammar could use some work.

Awesome second chapter! Loved everything...and nice to see Lavender with them and the rest of the gang. I DO hope you have Neville's parents coming out of their state...and can't wait for more Hermione/Ron adventures!

Great story. Are you going to be posting more of it soon? I can't wait to read more about the further adventures of Ron and Hermione. I look forward to reading the rest of your work.

Cosmyk Angel

Love it so far! Harry outplanning Hermione for the trip was hilarious!

A nice start, though some of the character seem a little off. Especially with the amount of swearing. I like the idea of them having to use Muggle transport. The Comic possibilities of trying to get Ron through an airport... :D

Still I'd imagine the casualties of the Battle Of Hogwarts would probably have one massive funeral/memorial that days of individual ones.

A great start to the fic. The foundation is set very well and I can't wait to see how Ron reacts during the plane ride. It's nice to see this tied in to your other fics. That makes for a very satisfying read. As always keep up the great work and I can't wait for the next update.
Oh yeah, to all readers who haven't yet read her other stories I highly recommend taking the time to read them. Not only will they make you laugh, but as I said before they all tie in with each other.