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amazing story, i love the plot and charcters your making, hope more comes :)

Honestly, for something I'm reading on an adult fanfiction site I find myself in a real quandary; the Death Eaters as presented in the books simply aren't that smart (nor are they some massively well trained fighting force or any of that crap; the inner circle was held stymied in a running battle by 6 5th years - and also would have problems from being in Azkaban in several cases). Umbridge certainly isn't smart, though she is cruel and ignorant as are the rest so the situation of them showing up and trumping everything as well as the whole being able to almost instantly find the pair of Pansy and Harry at the wedding just doesn't ring true to me.

Also the whole jealous stupid Hermione got old as well... Wards were never covered in canon, for fucks sake we don't even know that there were actually wards at Privet Drive - only that Dumbledore said there were. So reluctantly I'm going to give this a pass at this point. The writing is good to excellent and the sex scenes are well written but the technical side of things I just don't agree with the position we've seen in your story. Best of luck.

Like the story so far, got hooked on Harry/Pansy fics with yers, finished this and the first one in just a couple days, can't wait for the next chapter.

i know this is another story, but is there any possibilities of you continuing bossy in bed? really loved the danni/harry part. anyway your a great writer, love your stories, cheers

I like the story.

Wow, that was like night and day, the first draft to this. I LOVE what you did with Hermione, spot on work. But even better was how you changed Ron's pov, and all of those little references to chess were *brilliant*. We got to see his thought process unfold during the whole fight and it really made him shine as a character. When you get Ron right, it's the dog's bollocks.

The fight was really gripping and filled with excitement. Great cliffhanger. I'm seeing the escape from the Ministry all over again, but this time Ron's injury might be a bit more serious. And what of Fenrir raking his nails across Harry? Uh-oh, not good in his state, to have the added aggression.

Wondering how Harry will ever forgive Pansy at this point. It does not look good for our lovers. But great work!

My captcha word was iBreath, lol.

Oh-ho! As good ol' J.R. would say, "Business is about to pick up!"

Aww...Harry TOTALLY should have choked the life out of Malfoy. A Lannister always pays his debts. Wait...wrong series...

Sex was completely unnecessary in this chapter, so you won't hear any complaints from me. Honestly, I don't see how you can feasibly do any sex in the next chapter either, unless it's between Ron and Hermione. (Have they actually gotten "together" yet in this story? I don't remember; I find them to be a terrible match and have thus been focusing mostly on Harry and Pansy in this story.) Things should not be that easy/quick to patch up between Harry and Pansy, in my opinion.

I look forward to what's coming next...and once again, I'm torn as to whether I'd rather see you update this or DTDM next.

Hm... i guess it was plausible how it ended. Pretty close to what happened in book with few MINOR expections. Well, still liked it.

Judging by Hermione