rate_review Reviews

If you're going to write in third person, the most common is to use the past tense. It also makes it flow easier. The correct spelling of tragedy is that, not tradgity. You might want to get a beta reader.

I'm sorry but this needs quite a bit of work before its even readable. Most prominently, the lack of paragraphs. If you had any, they haven't survived the upload, you need to hit the returnn key a couple times at the end of a graph to start a new one, like so.

The other major problem I see is the uses of tenses. The fic starts out in present tense but finished in the past tense.