rate_review Reviews

I don't know if it's the way you're writing, or if your computer isn't spacing things right, but this last chapter needs some structure. It's very difficult to read and there are places where it looks like there are some missing ideas. Do you have a beta? You might want to find one to help reread your work. Just a suggestion.

Fantastic story I'll say.
colours on Ronikins damm hilarious I literally 'Laughed Out Loud'

can't wait to read the next chapter.


Max

I just noticed, when lupin has the class confront the bogart the thing he is afraid of wasn't a yellow ball it was the full moon. He turned the moon into a balloon which he popped

Awesome so far.
I liked the scene between Harry and Draco. They both seem so innocent.
Very well done, keep going. ^^

Me again :)

Loved the way you revealled the truth about Riddle to the Slytherin house. Wow what a shock for them. I really enjoyed the part with Colin and the photo. what a sweet thing for him to do. I had a really good giggle about Draco's reference to Lucius' "Special Study" LOL.

Looking forward to the next one.

Soooo need chapter 16!!!

The kissing scene was amazing. Very nicely done.
I can't help but feel sorry for Ron though. I know he betrayed Harry and acted like a prat, but the people in this are very harsh for treating him like that.
The plot is brilliant, the spelling is perfect the grammar is flawless and you definitely need a medal for keeping my attention for this long without including sex.
VERY well done.
I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Chapter 15!!! I love guiltless brownies!!!! That was wonderful!!!

hehehehhehe Toilet Bowl King. Still laughing about that. Classic funny part. Loved Snape's response to plotting students, especially since the ones he heard weren't Slytherins. Peeves being a brat and the skillet also quite amusing.

The first kisses were written really sweetly. Just the type of snogging 13-14 year olds should be doing. The hesitancy and unsureness was something that you don't see often and very well done.

Ginny = mega bitch sorry forgot to say delusional as well. There is no hint in the books or in earlier parts of you story that Harry was even contemplating a girlfriend yet alone Ginny. Was a bit presumptuous of her to get so bent out of shape. Well done :)

Looking forward to the next one, and promise I'll get it back to you quicker now that I'm not stuck in a bed.

Yay, They finally kissed ^_^ Happy to see that everyone is ok with it, this way they don't have to be hiding it.

Please update chapter 15 soon ^_^

Jan