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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am really enjoying this story, i ususally only read Harry/Hermione fics butr accidently stumbled accross this one and was pleasently suprised at how much i enjoyed the Harry/Pansy chemistry, my hope is that you continue on.
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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I realy do love this story. This is my favorite rare couple. Can't wait to read more.
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February 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2
I am really, really digging this, Daye! I forgot to review the first chapter when I first read it a few weeks ago, but I'm glad you've kept posting more chapters. Chapter 2 was even more revelatory into their characters and I really like your voice in this.
I am really, really digging this, Daye! I forgot to review the first chapter when I first read it a few weeks ago, but I'm glad you've kept posting more chapters. Chapter 2 was even more revelatory into their characters and I really like your voice in this.
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February 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4&5
Loved the fight, it was so realistic. I enjoyed having Harry's very male mindset try and figure out what the hell Pansy was smarting about. Harry going cold over the Draco Malfoy line was so in canon and delicious to boot. I also loved this line:
Whenever the older Gryffindor boys talked about sex, they had also spoken most disparaging of this; the missionary position, describing it as tame and boring. Now, as Pansy pulled him down into an embrace so tight the front of their bodies seemed to meld into one, Harry could only wonder if those boys had been doing it right because this was the most intense feeling he could remember in his entire life.
Great observation. Their entire passionate tryst at the Prefects bath was so full of feeling and joy. Up until the fight, that is.
The reunion was great, too. I liked the idea of Harry's head injury being more dire than Ms. Rowling perceived a blow to the head to be. His fall as he ran to grab hold of Pansy was perfect. And the sexual position--Win! Love 69, so awesome. All around wonderful depiction of a make up. I adore how thoughtful and concerned Harry is for Pansy's feelings, especially when he realizes he's hurt her or that things have suddenly changed on him. He's not as thick and self-absorbed as some fanficers make him out to be.
Really enjoying this story. I'm a sucker for a Harry/Pansy, so great pairing, there.
Loved the fight, it was so realistic. I enjoyed having Harry's very male mindset try and figure out what the hell Pansy was smarting about. Harry going cold over the Draco Malfoy line was so in canon and delicious to boot. I also loved this line:
Whenever the older Gryffindor boys talked about sex, they had also spoken most disparaging of this; the missionary position, describing it as tame and boring. Now, as Pansy pulled him down into an embrace so tight the front of their bodies seemed to meld into one, Harry could only wonder if those boys had been doing it right because this was the most intense feeling he could remember in his entire life.
Great observation. Their entire passionate tryst at the Prefects bath was so full of feeling and joy. Up until the fight, that is.
The reunion was great, too. I liked the idea of Harry's head injury being more dire than Ms. Rowling perceived a blow to the head to be. His fall as he ran to grab hold of Pansy was perfect. And the sexual position--Win! Love 69, so awesome. All around wonderful depiction of a make up. I adore how thoughtful and concerned Harry is for Pansy's feelings, especially when he realizes he's hurt her or that things have suddenly changed on him. He's not as thick and self-absorbed as some fanficers make him out to be.
Really enjoying this story. I'm a sucker for a Harry/Pansy, so great pairing, there.
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February 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6
Aww! That felt a little abrupt at the end. However, it was a nice touch to include more of the HBPs plot and have Harry talking to Dumbledore about his secret affair. DD's response was typical, but I liked the shadowing of his obsession with Grindelwald. Harry and Pansy finally talking like girlfriend/boyfriend, or at least as real friends, was satisfying. Now, I'm getting eager for someone to notice Harry's diversion and say something about it. Wonder how you're going to have the big reveal? It could go so many ways.
Still enjoying this, but I will note that Ch 6 suffered a bit from intense can't-wait-to-postitus. Lots of typos and mistakes. Thank goodness for the edit button.
Aww! That felt a little abrupt at the end. However, it was a nice touch to include more of the HBPs plot and have Harry talking to Dumbledore about his secret affair. DD's response was typical, but I liked the shadowing of his obsession with Grindelwald. Harry and Pansy finally talking like girlfriend/boyfriend, or at least as real friends, was satisfying. Now, I'm getting eager for someone to notice Harry's diversion and say something about it. Wonder how you're going to have the big reveal? It could go so many ways.
Still enjoying this, but I will note that Ch 6 suffered a bit from intense can't-wait-to-postitus. Lots of typos and mistakes. Thank goodness for the edit button.
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February 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Guess I'll review two chapters at once. Don't know how you write these chapters so fast; I feel like I write at a snail's pace in comparison!
Chapter 4: I think this was my favorite chapter so far. I like the ever-evolving relationship between Harry and Pansy. It started as just sex (ha! It's Just Sex), but they're gradually falling for each other. I like how you haven't immediately made them all romantic; it wouldn't fit given their rocky past. I like the direction this chapter took. And as for the similarities between this chapter and Chapter 2 of my own fic, Yule Ball Debauchery: I didn't even think of it myself until one specific line, where Harry observed the water dripping down Pansy's bare butt. That reminded me of Harry similarly ogling Parvati's wet, naked arse in my own story. But that's obviously just a coincidental thing. Both of our scenes may have taken place in the Prefect's Bath, but as you said, the nature of your scene was very different than mine. And it's not like I'm the first person to write about an erotic trip to the Prefect's Bath; my chapter was inspired by a Harry/Hermione oneshot called "Expressions of Gratitude." Oh, and thanks for the kind words about YBD!
Chapter 5: At first, I felt like their reconciliation happened too quickly...and then I realized that a lot of time had passed in between chapters. I think it might have been interesting to have another chapter in between the fight in the bath and the make-up sex, just to further establish the loneliness they both were experiencing. But hey, it's your story, and once I remembered how late in the year Harry's injury came, it all clicked just fine. I wasn't quite expecting Pansy to be so upfront about her changing feelings, but I guess the time apart, combined with Harry's injury, helped her along. This was another good chapter in developing the relationship, and I look forward to seeing where things go from here.
Chapter 4: I think this was my favorite chapter so far. I like the ever-evolving relationship between Harry and Pansy. It started as just sex (ha! It's Just Sex), but they're gradually falling for each other. I like how you haven't immediately made them all romantic; it wouldn't fit given their rocky past. I like the direction this chapter took. And as for the similarities between this chapter and Chapter 2 of my own fic, Yule Ball Debauchery: I didn't even think of it myself until one specific line, where Harry observed the water dripping down Pansy's bare butt. That reminded me of Harry similarly ogling Parvati's wet, naked arse in my own story. But that's obviously just a coincidental thing. Both of our scenes may have taken place in the Prefect's Bath, but as you said, the nature of your scene was very different than mine. And it's not like I'm the first person to write about an erotic trip to the Prefect's Bath; my chapter was inspired by a Harry/Hermione oneshot called "Expressions of Gratitude." Oh, and thanks for the kind words about YBD!
Chapter 5: At first, I felt like their reconciliation happened too quickly...and then I realized that a lot of time had passed in between chapters. I think it might have been interesting to have another chapter in between the fight in the bath and the make-up sex, just to further establish the loneliness they both were experiencing. But hey, it's your story, and once I remembered how late in the year Harry's injury came, it all clicked just fine. I wasn't quite expecting Pansy to be so upfront about her changing feelings, but I guess the time apart, combined with Harry's injury, helped her along. This was another good chapter in developing the relationship, and I look forward to seeing where things go from here.
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February 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Did not think it could be possible on a Harry Pansy pairing, but it does seem that it could work. I wish Harry was staying at the castle and her as well. Maybe something dramatic will happen at the Burrow and he will return early. Next chapter please.
Liz
Liz
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February 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
No, Harry being stupid around the opposite sex isn't really a deal breaker for me, I was just making an observation. I think HBP would have been better if the alien had just burst out of his chest and killed a bunch of people.
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February 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. Hope it works out for them. Keep up the good work.
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February 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
A nice chapter. I would have ended it with something about the door to Madam Pomfrey's office quietly closing or something to that effect.
I'm really hoping you put some dirty stuff in, some nice kinks and other fun stuff. Oh! You could have Harry ask about fucking Pansy's ass and her saying she will let him fuck hers when he lets her fuck his. He could scoff and say she doesn't have the right parts, she replies that she could easily transfigure a strap on. Harry thinks about it over the next little while, the thought intriguing him before he says ok. I'll let you in on a lil secret, it's what I do. Guys always eventually ask to fuck my cute lil ass so I tell them that, so far 4 out of the 5 guys I've tried it with have caved in and said yes, one simply saying 'ok' after I told him that.
But it would be so hot! There are hardly any fics where Harry gets pegged. I guess it's because 90% of the fics are written by guys and anything in male ass = gay. Immature creatures.
Write more soon. I really like this story!
Toodles!!
I'm really hoping you put some dirty stuff in, some nice kinks and other fun stuff. Oh! You could have Harry ask about fucking Pansy's ass and her saying she will let him fuck hers when he lets her fuck his. He could scoff and say she doesn't have the right parts, she replies that she could easily transfigure a strap on. Harry thinks about it over the next little while, the thought intriguing him before he says ok. I'll let you in on a lil secret, it's what I do. Guys always eventually ask to fuck my cute lil ass so I tell them that, so far 4 out of the 5 guys I've tried it with have caved in and said yes, one simply saying 'ok' after I told him that.
But it would be so hot! There are hardly any fics where Harry gets pegged. I guess it's because 90% of the fics are written by guys and anything in male ass = gay. Immature creatures.
Write more soon. I really like this story!
Toodles!!