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hey Nat-chan!! I finally got an account, so you can start using this to refer to me as your beta. I found some minor errors that I didn't catch on the first round. >.< bad me! so Just let me know if you wanna bother with correcting them. It's totally not a big deal. Good Job!

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Chapter 2 please!!!

this story is very interesting i would like to see were it goes a very original idea.....very good...well i have you bookmarked so i hope to be reading more.

This is really interesting so far. I can't wait to read more. But I just wanted to point out that when you switch randomly between narrator tense, it breaks up the story and makes it hard to read. It makes the story flow better when you stick with just first person [as in 'I went into the room'], or third person [as in 'Draco went into the room']. Don't get me wrong here, I'm not telling you that you have to, it's just that it could make the story that much better. Either way, I'm still up for reading it. xD Please give us more to read soon.