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Great story. you might want to watch spelling of: shelves(selves is how you wrote it) vials (vitals) Chaos (caos) and I know there were others in earlier chapters but I didn't make note of them.

Really enjoying your story, going to pop to your profile to see if you have SP II up.

I'm really enjoying this original take on Order of the Phoenix. I have noticed though that you seem to give away a lot of your good plot points when replying to comments. Maybe instead of telling people what will happen before it does, simply say that they will see what happens in upcoming chapters and you might get more comments that way especially if something really peaks the interest of your readers.

I don't think I've read a fic with Super-powerful!Harry where he got his powers from a potion before, but I'm thoroughly enjoying the story so far even if this is my first comment. :) One last thing, you and your beta need to refresh your memories on canon spellings for things like the Hogwarts house names and things like that. I realise english isn't your first language and only have the odd spelling mistake is really well done. Keep up the great work and don't be discouraged by my comments, I only made them to make you a better author and I know what its like to have discouraging/not-encouraging comments because I write fan fic and original fiction as well. :)

I enjoyed reading your story, I cant wait to start SP II.

Thanks for writing
MPF

Okay, good story so far, what I've seen of it. But I've seen some problems that suggest you are not a native English speaker. Syntactical problems, I guess you'd say. You say "remember" when you mean "remind" -- in English, the individual remembers something, but if person A wants person B to remember something, person A *reminds* person B of that fact. E.g., "Let me remind you that if you do that, you are liable to go off that cliff and break your neck."

Similarly, you don't seem to get the difference in English between a borrower and a lender. The LENDER has something the borrower needs, and LENDS it to him or her. He doesn't BORROW it to them. They borrow it FROM him. The term is point-of-view specific...the person who has it, lends it, the person who needs it must borrow it.

HTH.

awsome story cant wait for the next one

Great story! I can't wait to read part two! :D

Excellent!!! Keep up the good work it is greatly apperated. Full marks!

Ich habe gelesen, viele ff's rund, aber dieses hat fing meine volle Aufmerksamkeit, und ich bin sofort Jagd auf SP2

ps: das ist die ersten 35 Kapitel Fic las ich einen Schuss

und ja, ich habe einen

Ich habe gelesen, viele ff's rund, aber dieses hat fing meine volle Aufmerksamkeit, und ich bin sofort Jagd auf SP2

ps: das ist die ersten 35 Kapitel Fic las ich einen Schuss

und ja, ich habe einen

Great story.