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October 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I really do love this story. Are you going to continue it? PLEASE....PLEASE....PLEASE!!!!!!!!
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September 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
cute story, i really like the AU you've created. there are a few spelling/grammar mistakes floating around, but nothing terribly distracting. looking forward to the next chapter. keep up the good work!
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July 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
so far so good, quite interesting.
only problems I found are the vocabs and the spelling (a bit of grammar) mistakes.
really could use a beta or spell-check, then it'd be much smoother to read
only problems I found are the vocabs and the spelling (a bit of grammar) mistakes.
really could use a beta or spell-check, then it'd be much smoother to read
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May 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Adorable premise so far on this. I can't wait for more!
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January 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love that severus named his dog the dark lord. It's so like him. I like how this story is going. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
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January 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Soooo need chapter 4!!!!
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January 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I definitely like the story so far, but I do notice a few grammar/spelling errors here and there (like when Pansy is describing what happened to Harry). I read your AN about your concerns with having a beta, but you know you don't really have to give any beta free, willy-nilly control over your story. Just be specific about how you want them to edit your work. I edit a story for someone, and I make my corrections in red. Anything I remove is struck through and any additions are underlined. So the author isn't required to keep any of the changes I make. They can go through, see what changes I made, decide if they want to keep them, and then make the changes on the original. That would be one way to get your story edited, but to still have control. Then maybe if you got to a point where you trusted the beta, you could give them more free reign, or they could just continue on that way.
Anyways, I like that James is the boy who lived. It's an interesting change. And I guess we're going to encounter Tom Riddle at some point. I'm guessing he won't be called Voldemort since that's the name of Severus' snake. I can't wait to see how it continues from here and how the trip goes. With Severus and Remus there, I imagine it'll be quite an interesting trip.
Anyways, I like that James is the boy who lived. It's an interesting change. And I guess we're going to encounter Tom Riddle at some point. I'm guessing he won't be called Voldemort since that's the name of Severus' snake. I can't wait to see how it continues from here and how the trip goes. With Severus and Remus there, I imagine it'll be quite an interesting trip.
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January 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi! I love your story! I was just wondering about who the top in the relationship will be. From the hints in your story, I would guess that Draco will be the top. That would be awesome! I LOVE a top Draco! but either way works since it's your story! Love it!
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January 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
about #3...
Okay...not bad, not bad at all. :-)
Despite the obvious grammar errors, this is really
a nice little fic you have going. Keep it going.
Okay...not bad, not bad at all. :-)
Despite the obvious grammar errors, this is really
a nice little fic you have going. Keep it going.
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January 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi
Nice fic, I like the premise and you write well. One thing, I assume you still mean it to be set in Britain, if so the bit at the end with Hermione makes no sense. Nobody worries about medical cover in Britain because we have free government run health care for everyone. Also if money was stolen then a police service would be able to get more money from the government. The only reason they would make police officers redundant would be if it was part of a nationwide policing level reduction which would never happen because there would be a public outcry.
I really do like this, I hope you continue!
Nice fic, I like the premise and you write well. One thing, I assume you still mean it to be set in Britain, if so the bit at the end with Hermione makes no sense. Nobody worries about medical cover in Britain because we have free government run health care for everyone. Also if money was stolen then a police service would be able to get more money from the government. The only reason they would make police officers redundant would be if it was part of a nationwide policing level reduction which would never happen because there would be a public outcry.
I really do like this, I hope you continue!