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This is coming along so nicely. I'm a fan of your stories, one of those silent few who add to your views but not your reviews. Mainly because a simple "I liked it!" doesn't seem like enough. Still... I liked it. If this ends up being half as good as your others, it'll still be one of the best on here. lol, not to imply it isn't top notch. Also enjoying The Apprentice. I love the way you write Voldemort. Very believable. Even those annoying teaser endings where "all is not what it seems" are spot on. I'm loving the self doubt and loyalty that LV is showing, because first and foremost I enjoy the high powered romance (the twisting plot and superb narrative style come a close second). I believe I've gushed enough, feel the love, and update soon. :)

C.

She stumbled a couple of times, after which she tried in vain to shake off the high-heeled shoes. However, since she was no Cinderella, they remained firmly attached to her feet. So, she had no choice but to walk cautiously. She didn't fancy falling on her face.


I love the cinderella reference


Frightened, she took a step back and ... planted her heel right in the skirt's fabric. Panicking, her arms windmilled around as she tried to remain her balance and failed miserably. Looking like a complete idiot, she fell flat on her behind; her legs spread wide-eagle, though she did manage to break most of her fall with her hands. Completely red in her face and leaning on one elbow, Hermione adjusted the skirt, so she'd stop flashing him before she dared to glance in his direction.


haha how embaressing.



"Time for my price," he breathed, placing her on the bed.

thats the second time you said price.....shouldn't it be prize?



"Mmm..." He tilted his head. "Too bad." His hand moved just above where they were joined. "It made you dry," he commented like he was grading a badly written paper. "Soon," he promised, "you'll want me to Crucio you during intercourse. The curse alone will make you so wet, so horny; you will fuck whoever I put in front of you just to get a release. I will have you on your hands and knees, taking you like the dog you are. You will whore yourself out in every position available. And I will not grant you that release, Mudblood, until you have fully and utterly submitted yourself to me." He rubbed his finger over her clit and she cried out. "Look at that," he mocked at the moisture that dripped out of her. "One little touch of her master and the little Mudblood slut is ready to go again.


great part






Laughing, he caught her before she would have crashed to the floor. "You like that, don't you, you little Mudblood slut?" he hissed in her ear venomously. "And the best part of it, I can have it fuck you all day long while I am away, come home to have you wet, soar, and raw before me, and with a snap of my fingers, it will be gone and I can take its place instantaneously." He lowered her to the floor with her side against his chest, roaming his hands freely over her skin. "Or I can make it fuck you, while you pleasure me orally." He captured her mouth and French-kissed her thoroughly. His words, his kisses, his touches, and his device

Nerys you little devil! Why didn't you tell me you had updated??? I must have missed it with all my moving around and being sick... baaah! Oh, well then I hope that this mean I don't have to wait so long for the next chapter? Right? Well, perhaps I should read this one first ^^
Naaaw! Poor Harry :,( Now I'm all sad for him. Not so much for Hagrid's sake... I don't know, I just don't like him all that much... I mean, not that there is anything wrong with him.. I was just never able to like him in the books. Think it's because he doesn't like cats ;)
And now Ron is drawing the wrong conclusions again. Oh, please, can't Voldemort kill him just a little?
Yes, well if healer Lewis tells you it's because of stress, then whaaat can be wrooong? Tsk... Yes, Hermione, feel some doubt, maybe Ginny was right... No, no, Lewis is not right! No! He does have a reason to lie to you! HE IS NOT GENTLE AND GENEROUS! GAH! Stupid girl...
Haha! That is right Tommy-boy, Hermione never shuts up! And not when she is a cup and doesn't have to sleep or anything (right?) she can speak all the time! And you know you love it!
"Lord Voldemort did not need to be told how he should achieve his goals." - Yes, hun, if that makes you feel better, keep telling yourself that. (No, my Lord, I wasn't sarcastic. There is no need to point your wand at me, I was merely.. AAAAAAH!)
"Perhaps my other self had known her and that

Hey! I've got no time (I swear, I shouldn't be reviewing right now, bad, bad me!), but you two DARED to leave the story with such a cliffie ( at least I think so, I'm delusional, so feel free not to believe). Oh my god, what is Tom planning? I think I can imagine.. hmm.. a thing or two. Read chapter 8 and the beginning of it reminded me a bit of Nerys' 'Bittersweet...', but afterwards... I'd say there was too much sex for me to consume (yeah, that definitely sounds strange) in one chapter. It could have been a bit more subtle. Heck, a lot more. Too soon too much. But still better than anything I've read these days (including my History textbooks, all 6 of them), so please do continue! And Nerys, could you one day or another subtly remind Serpie that her 'Colours' remain terribly unfinished! Such shame.
Now it's time, it's time (Bella! Oh my...). I have a meeting with the Dark Lord. As the matter of fact, He's pretending to be my history book, but I know for sure it's just an act.
Be happy, update soon^^

O.K. I take it back -- cup torture is awesome. I should say, "reverse" cup torture, because I don't think I've ever enjoyed a Hermione lecture more than her horcrux taking down Voldy. That was brilliant and, oddly enough, completely in character! Hermione could make anyone feel stupid; why not the most powerful, evil wizard ever? And I love that Ron's natural assholery is bringing Voldy closer to Hermione (in Tom's own special way, of course). Red-headed git should be good for something...

God, I love this story...In a total creeptastic, non-con, slightly alcohol induced way. :-D Keep up the good work!

So at first I had no idea what was going on, it was so random I honestly thought you'd uploaded a chapter for another story lol. Of course as I read on to scene two, it was like ahhhh . . . so that's what that was about. In other words, it was great. I loved the different approach you took in this chappie, and I love that Tom is starting to feel conflicted. Great job, guys, keep it up!!!
:)

Hellu again... just stopping by. Checking in the story... humbidum... I just realised that I really want a new chapter but I guess you haven't had time to update yet? No? Oh, well... Does this mean I can no longer procrastinate my own story? Hm... It feels like I should be doing something outside the HP-world. What could that be? There is something lying next to me... a book? Hm. Project management? Noo, that doesn't sound like fun. What do you mean I have a paper to hand in next Thursday? It's ages until that!
Still no chapter? No... sigh.
Okay... I will finish my own story...
Toodels

Aha! I remembered my password. I'm such a good girl. And even better; I finally started reading this story. So there is no need to continue poking me, Nerys! *pulls out tongue* Okay, so I won't leave such a long review right now. Want to continue reading. Good beginning girls, good beginning indeed. I'm sure the Dark Lord is very pleased. Hermione's already possessed, Tommy-boy is looking good again... yes, all very well written. Now I'm curious so I'll continue to read and see what happens when Hermione wakes up! Cheers!

chapter 2
Haha! Nice, this must be the only time when the bad-guy-speech "I'm the baddest of the baddest and this is my secret but you won't be able to do anything about it or tell anyone" has actually worked. Now we readers knows what is going on but the heroin has no clue. Nice, nice. And Voldemort is known to have a lot of bad-guy-speeches. JK let him have a whole chapter in book 4 with almost only his bad-guy-speech. I think he gets off on hearing his own voice.
And poor Hermione thinks it's just a nightmare. Mohahaha! can't wait to see what will happen to her once she realises that he is real and not just an hallucination. I have a feeling it will take quite some time....
Next chapter!