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September 28, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I really like this. It will be interesting to see his reaction to finding that Hermione has had two sex partners after his 'death' and if Hermione will still undergo Bella's torture session. :3
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July 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i love this! i want more
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May 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The story itself is very good, but you could really use a beta. A lot of words are used incorrectly or spelled wrong.
Still, an enjoyable read regardless.
Still, an enjoyable read regardless.
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January 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i like this story please update it. unless that was the end. thats kind of a way to end it i guess.
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July 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this story! I like that Hermoine is more experienced. So many stories portray her as an innocent or stiff but smart girls can be hot too! Please update again soon.
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February 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Needs some proof reading. For example you have 'their he stood' which should be 'there he stood'
I would say it was exactly bad but most of them do seem a little out of character. I can't see Voldemort noticing someone was using occulemency against him and not being highly suspicious.
I would say it was exactly bad but most of them do seem a little out of character. I can't see Voldemort noticing someone was using occulemency against him and not being highly suspicious.
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January 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I just saw this one today--tonight--same difference really. But, I enjoyed reading what you had, though, no to be mean, there are some obvious, and rather glaring errors. If you could fix those, it would be a wonderful story.
Longer chapters would be nice as well.
If you are still in need of a Beta, I would be glad to help. I need some practice.
Cheers,
DeathDancer
Longer chapters would be nice as well.
If you are still in need of a Beta, I would be glad to help. I need some practice.
Cheers,
DeathDancer
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January 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Okay I will step up and tell you that I like your story. Double agents, secrets, and a strong Hermione instead of a wallflower make this fun. Oh and there is nothingwrong with asking for reviews.