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I read your AN and as for scratching the story well, that's up to you. From a reader's vantage, I'm still completely confused as to what's going on. I have no clue why he's been dragged forward, why Hermione should go back, how Draco will be borne. Perhaps, you need to plot out and outline your chapters? Maybe go back and edit a bit what you wrote. The basic premise is interesting but what's the reason for being? Hence the plot? That's what's missing for me, personally. You write concisely and clearly but you need to just sit and think about where you want the characters to go and what's linking them together. I dare say, you know what it is but its not coming across to this reader, I'm sorry. Time travel stories are tough, hence why I don't touch them - I completely confuse myself, so kudos for going down that road. I think may be just go back and re-think the story a touch or edit it, rather than scrapping a good outline. I feel compelled to say this is not a flame but constructive criticism you requested in your note. Good luck. I'll look for more of your work. :-)

Chapter 8: Ooooh, OMG, please don

I like this story but if you think that starting over will make it better........ go for it!!!!!! We will be here to read and review........... Good Luck!

The sequences seemed a little choppy, but as you said, you are under a great deal of pressure right now. I was glad to see the update, even if you are planning to redo the entire thing, although I'm not sure why you would. Take a deep breath, get real life taken care of. Most readers will still be around someplace when you get back. Good luck with your submission. (That really came out a lot different than it sounded in my head. Sorry)

I think I'm really starting to like this. Looking forward to another chapter!!!

Chapter 7: Oh my, Lucius is telling Hermione the truth about his forward time travel. And she doesn

I will join this party.......... Wow! Back in time....... I love those fics...........

I hope you haven't abandoned this? It's much too interesting to let go, but five months without an update does make me wonder a little bit.

Chapter 6: Hermione is warming up to YLucius quite nicely. It must be confusing and weird to YLucius to constantly have reasons for not being present with his

I am loving your story. It is nice to see Lucius in this light. Can't wait for the next chapter.