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by CLHarris

person MadiH
schedule January 1, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Please continue this story!

person Jenn
schedule January 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great so far! I like it a lot! I can't wait for more!
schedule December 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Had to laugh about the hairbrush that Lucius chose to defend himself with. What, was he going to dazzle the burglar with his grooming skills? That was too funny.

And then there is the whole hotness of the last bit of the chapter. I like the way you made Lucius menacing and desperate at the same time. That was a skillful bit of characterization. Lovely job on the hotness too. I really do like Pris. She's matter of fact about her situation, doesn't pity herself, and is still strong in the face of the violence. I do wonder what she's going to think of Lucius once he tells her of his past. That should be an interesting conversation.

Great job. I look forward to more from you.
person apkblack
schedule December 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very enjoyable start (and that's saying something, because I don't usually read "Lucius Goes Muggle" stories). I particularly enjoyed the way you allowed him to become dangerous ... his whisper of "and I reveled in it" gave me the shivers.

Well done. Hoping you update soon.
schedule December 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
What a gangbuster start. I can't wait to read more. Your characterisation of Lucius is spot on, and Pris is fresh.