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Drat.. no more chapters. I hope this isnt an abandoned story - I was quite enjoying that. Its a novel idea. In fact its so novel as to be twenty miles east of completely bafflingly surreal. Nevertheless its awesome. These are all the interesting men and the only interesting girl. It'd be hard to otherwise create a situation where they could all shag unhindered by their natural characters. The only other interesting character omitted would be voldemort, if only for the purpose of a further sexual creature - probably in his tom riddle form, however since he's dead and since even in THIS bizarre scenario there is NO way that a dark lord would be able to engage with the other characters on anything resembling an even footing, it would complicate things considerably. Even to have them all imprisoned by him would render lines of loyalty which here are softened to the point of usefulness. I really hope you havent abandoned this story - i'd love to see the other rooms mentioned in the first chapter used.. i'd like to see the severus/sirius situation and the lucius/draco one too.. and of course lucius/severus/hermione, lucius/draco/hermione, sirius/remus/hermione. etc etc You write well. It is easy to quickly become immersed in your story, rendering even an unrealistic scenario believable. Your style is adult, you dont appear to blush over words and the scenes you paint are actually quite erotic and sexually charged - e.g. the situation in the shower with draco, severus when hermione returned to the room after draco, shaving lucius, lucius and severus and hermione in the bed. If i were to criticise anything (and I actually dont think I really would) it would be that you could be more detailed in your description of things. The environment is painted very vaguely for the most part. You describe more of what people *do* and how things *are* rather than how they look, sound, taste, smell or feel. While the reader will obviously construct a prototype of the image you are painting using whatever sensories they personally prefer, adding little touches like that enhances this scene, makes it more real. But its kind of a preference thing i suppose. Some people prefer less anchored images. That would be my only very minor critique. The situation with zabini and andromeda and narcissa is confusing but this is fine as the story is still young and its only a plot device to get the characters into the position desired.

Please update!!! I like this story I want more!

I love this story! I've been reading it since chapter one and I registered specifically so I could review it. PLEASE continue!! I adore what you've done with his story and I can't wait to see more!

Absolutely loved it! I was getting a sad feeling that I was going to have to move on from a story with such great potential!

I love it so far. It is an interesting concept. I can't wait to see what happens next and how it all turns out!! Hope you post another chapter soon.

Great idea, looking forward to the next chapters, how will her encounters with Remus and Sirius go!?!

I think this is interesting and I want to see where it's going. I like it a lot so update soon!!!

I love this story, really great plot idea. I can't wait for the next chapter! Please continue as soon as you can!

LOVE IT!!!!!

you tease!!!! please update!!!!