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for To Comfort a Hidden Hero

by Aunjel18

person catnona
schedule December 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'd be very interested to see where you are taking this plot. So I really do hope that you continue to write and post this story.

On a side note, you used the word thierselves and it grated on my nerves a bit, when you should be using the word themselves. Thierselve isn't a word as far as I know. Grammar and spelling aside the story has potential
person tamikolee
schedule November 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay, I like it.
person Aunjel18
schedule November 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow already 56 hits in just 20 minutes and a review I feel so good. Im glad you liked it. If things keep going like this I will be motivated to have another chapter up by tommorow night :D
person Alaine
schedule November 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Right, where to start? I did like the idea you have, and the chapter itself was not badly written. There are just a few things that bother me a little; such as not writing the first words "Room of Requirements" in capital letters. Futhermore a few spelligmistakes were scattered here and there throughout the story, so I think you should consider getting a beta. Do not get me wrong, I do like the whole idea, I am just trying to give you some constructive critism:)